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雅思大作文范文-野生动物保护

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题目:Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


翻译:野生动物在21世纪没有立足之地,保护它们是对资源的浪费。你在多大程度上同意或不同意?


类型:同意与否类


话题:社会类-动物保护类


关键词:wild animals, have no place, a waste of resources


分析:本文讨论的要点在于①野生动物是否还有生存的空间②是否应该调动人类现有的各种资源去保护它们。同意方需要写出:即便在21世纪野生动物也很重要,它们有权利生存也有足够的空间供给它们生存,保护它们绝非浪费资源;而否定方则需要论证:在21世纪我们不需要野生动物了,人类应该用有限的资源全力发展自己,而非投入到野生动物保护。注意你的立场一定要清晰明确。


不知道小伙伴们有没有发现,雅思写作其实一直很紧追社会热点,前一阵澳大利亚大火引起了人们对于环境保护,气候变化的重视,然后在今年年初1月11日的考试中,就考察了环境保护类。最近面对新冠病毒疫情,乱食野生动物这个话题也开始引起人们极大的关注,预示着动物保护类的考题也很可能会再次回到雅思写作卷面上。


野生动物和我们人类一起生活在地球上,同为地球生态圈重要的一员,可惜由于人类的肆意捕杀,一些物种已经濒临灭绝(some species are on the edge of complete distinction),野生动物的数量也在逐渐减少。而人类,因为对野生动物的不尊重,不敬畏也得到了惩罚,03年的非典,非洲的埃博拉病毒,还有今天的新冠病毒都与野生动物息息相关。这让小编不禁想起2019年国家地理频道出品的一部美剧《血疫(The Hot Zone)》中的一段话:“When she falls ill her husband or her daughter tends to her. 当她生病时,她的丈夫或女儿会照顾她(而丈夫和女儿也可能因此染病) The Ebola virus spreads when we show each other love, kindness, affection. When we are most human. 当我们互相展现爱,善良和感情的时候, 当我们展现我们最人性的一面时,埃博拉病毒就会传播。” 野生动物从来都不会 have no place,21世纪和以前没有什么不同,它们的福祸都和我们人类息息相关,毕竟地球生态圈中的任何一员出现了问题,都会带来整个生态圈的大动荡。人类及时采取行动,保护野生动物,防范于未然,就是在保护我们自己。


为大家总结一下这个题目可以写的一些小点:


态度:disagree -不同意题目中的观点


21st century should be the right time to make the planet Earth livable for all species

Wild animals play an important role in balancing our ecosystem and stabilizing natural processes.


可写的野生动物重要性,观点1:pollination process (授粉过程)


Wild birds, bats, squirrels and bees enable fruit trees fertilization process and the production of seeds.


By helping pollination process wild animals ensure that we have forests and woodlands. And from these forests we are able to build houses for shelter, furniture for comfort living.


可写的野生动物重要性,观点2:insect population control ( 控制昆虫数量)


Animals play significant role in insect population control. Also, animals improve aesthetics of the earth in general. If there were no animals on our planet, for instance, the world would not be as colourful and different as it is today.


野生动物是否真的需要我们帮助?我们需要采取行动保护野生动物的原因:


Climate Change: Global warming causes dangerous changes to the landscape of our planet. These changes impact wild animals and their habitat.


Unregulated Hunting: Unregulated hunting and poaching causes the decline in the particular animals’ species. It is a major threat to wild animals.


Deforestation: People continuously develop, grow and expand their businesses. Sometimes it means invasion of wildlife habitat.


好啦,分析了这么多,咱们来看精选范文吧,前考官Simon老师的9分范文:


范文分析:


Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view.


(开头段简明扼要,背景介绍引出话题+个人观点的明确表达- 要点1:it is pointless to do sth 这个主语从句句型大家可以学习哦 要点2:同意与否类型的文章请大家一定记住-开头要明确表明立场) 


In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild animals have no place in the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists only for the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about this particular century that means that we suddenly have the right to allow or encourage the extinction of any species. Furthermore, there is no compelling reason(compelling形容词- 强有力的,不可抗拒的) why we should let animals die out. We do not need to exploit or destroy every last square metre of land in order to feed or accommodate the world’s population(好搭配-提供给人们吃喝的替换性说法). There is plenty of room for us to exist side by side with wild animals, and this should be our aim.


(主体1段:论证中踩了两个点,一个是权利,动物生存的权利;第二个是必要性,论证是否真的没有地方给野生动物了,是不是有必要让它们灭绝 --- 这一段都是在论证关键词:have no place)


I also disagree with the idea that protecting animals is a waste of resources. I(观点)t is usually the protection of natural habitats that ensures (确保)the survival of wild animals, and most scientists agree that these habitats are also crucial for human survival. (解释)For example, rainforests produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide and stabilise the Earth’s climate. If we destroyed these areas, the costs of managing the resulting changes to our planet would far outweigh the costs of conservation(保护,protection的同意替换词). (举例)By protecting wild animals and their habitats, we maintain the natural balance of all life on Earth.(总结)


(主体2段:保护野生动物的同时也保护了我们人类 -这一段的结构是:观点-解释-举例-总结- 这一段的结构写的非常好,详细而具体,非常值得小伙伴们借鉴,请仿写这个结构哦--- 本段论证关键词:a waste of resources)


In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.


(结尾重申观点,进行总结)


好词


1.常用词Reason的高分修饰词:


Compelling(强有力的)/ convincing(令人信服的,有说服力的) / plausible(貌似可行的) / adequate(足够的/恰当的)/ sufficient (充分的)/ sound (好的,合理的)/ primary(主要的,最重要的,最基本的)/ principal(主要的)/ justifiable(有道理的)+ reason

 

2.Feed 动词:为…提供食物;养活


雅思写作中的应用:Feed the world/starving.养活全世界/饥饿的人

 

段落论证小知识点:


今天我们这篇范文的主体2段的结构写的非常好,这种结构在考官范文段落中比较常见,因为这种‘观点-解释-举例-分析’‘观点-解释-举例-总结’或者‘观点-解释-后果1-后果2’的结构可以把一个观点说透,不容易出现观点含糊不清的情况,推荐以后在作文中进行使用,在6-7分的评分标准中提到一个词语叫做overgeneralise:


presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to overgeneralise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus.


这种结构可以帮助避免overgeneralise的出现,同时符合了高分文章中的relevant, extended and supported ideas.


好啦,今天的范文分析咱们可是讲了好多的干货,是不是觉得收获满满呢快点打开笔记本记录好词好句和写作要点吧。疫情当前,希望大家都能健康平安的在家好好复习,待到雅思复考时,都能取得心仪成绩


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