雅思大作文范文分析——人工智能

题目：

Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

翻译：有人认为，在不久的将来，人工智能领域的发展将对我们的生活产生积极影响。而另外一些人则认为我们并没有为此做好准备。 讨论双边的观点，并给出自己的看法。

话题：科技类

类型：双边讨论

关键词：artificial intelligence,  lives in the near future,  not prepared

解析：

说到人工智能（AI）对于很多人而言，最熟悉的应该就是呆萌小助手‘Siri’ 啦，当然还有Bixby ，小爱同学等等，既可以陪你聊天，又可以查天气，设闹钟。虽然有时候还是有点不听话或是喜欢‘装傻’，但也的确为我们的生活增添了不少便利。

在DeepMind,英伟达等大公司看中AI的巨大前景，轰轰烈烈的开展研究时，大众对于人工智能的认识却并不深，往往停留在语音助手，智能客服上面。

直到一个又一个令人震惊的新闻出现在媒体报道中，DeepMind的人工智能机器人AlphaGo通过对百万盘真人对战棋局的研究，以4：1的成绩击败了世界围棋李世石。(大家可以用作举例论证：AlphaGo is an AI developed by Google-owned British company DeepMind, and had already wrapped up a historic victory on Saturday by becoming the first ever computer program to beat the world champion Lee Se-dol.)

孟买人工智能创业公司MoglA通过2000万个社交媒体数据点分析了社交媒体上人们的情绪，的通过了解民意预测出了美国总统大选的结果-特朗普获胜。而这一结果是很多内部人士都预测失败的。 (MogIA correctly predicted the past four presidential elections including the Trump one.)

大众慢慢意识到，人工智能的聪明才智及复杂性。意识到原来钢铁侠的贾维斯是可能真实存在的。继续发展下去，人工智能很快就会在各个领域超越人类。  AI system becomes more powerful – superior to human performance in many or nearly all domains. 

人工智能比人类能干并不可怕，人类可以利用其才能为自己的生活增添便利。

但是极其聪明又不知疲倦的 AI has the potential to improve productivity, efficiency and accuracy. 会有很多人因其失去工作，普华永道曾发布数据预测到2030年，机器人将占据日本21%以上的工作岗位、英国30%的工作岗位、德国35%的工作岗位和美国38%的工作岗位。到下个世纪，他们将占据人类现有工作的一半以上。尤其是那些 jobs involving repetitive or basic problem-solving tasks.

当有一天人工智能发展到自我实现阶段，他们像人类一样要求自己的权利。当他们不再只是做逻辑思考和计算，开始出现感性思维时， 人工智能对人类的威胁或许就会出现。如果极其聪明的人工智能不再听命如旧，不再遵循人类的旨意，人类又将如何应对。

而这样的人工智能其实已经离我们很近了。因曾扬言要毁灭人类而被人熟知的机器人索菲亚，在2017年10月获得了沙特阿拉伯授予的公民身份。而她的名言：人不犯我我不犯人（If you’re nice to me and I will be nice to you),  更是令人毛骨悚然。倘若有一天，像电影《终结者》中那样，机器人想要反叛人类，占领世界，人类是否有能力战胜自己亲手缔造出来的全知全能的敌人呢？

太空探索技术的CEO马斯克曾说：“我们需要万分警惕人工智能， 他们比核武器更加危险” 而霍金（Stephen Hawking）也曾说：the emergence of artificial intelligence could be the "worst event in the history of our civilization."（作文可用）

人类至今也很难预测及探究AI最终会进化成什么样子，是拉开和人类的战争，还是与人类和平共处。 但需防患于未然， 对AI的独立运作需要加以严格的控制，保证是人类在控制机器，而非机器在控制人，（对于这个题目，还有一个有些难度，但是可以写的点，列给大家，大家可以酌情使用：

AI-enabled terrorism: Artificial intelligence will change the way conflicts are fought from autonomous drones, robotic swarms, and remote and nanorobot attacks. In addition to being concerned with a nuclear arms race, we'll need to monitor the global autonomous weapons race.） 

好啦，分析了这么多，咱们来一起看看今天的范文：

People seem to be either excited or worried（很巧妙的改写了题目） about the future impact of artificial intelligence. Personally I can understand the two opposing points of view(可直接搬到自己的文章中使用); I am both fascinated by developments in artificial intelligence and apprehensive（adj. 忧虑的；不安的） about its possible negative effects.

（开头段：题目改写+观点给出—可借用的部分：People seem to be either xx or xx about 题目事件. ）

On the one hand, the increasing intelligence of technology should bring some obvious benefits. Machines are clearly able to do many jobs better than humans can, especially in areas that require high levels of accuracy or calculations using large amounts of data. For example, robots are being developed that can carry out surgical procedures with greater precision than a human doctor, and we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves. （这个例子大家可以记住，科技改变生活的题目中都可以广泛使用-科技为人类带来的好处）Such technologies can improve safety by reducing the likelihood of human errors. It is easy to imagine how these developments, and many others, will steadily improve our quality of life.

（主体1段-方观点：一共5句话，结构：观点-解释-举例-分析-总结）

On the other hand, I share the concerns of people who believe that artificial intelligence may harm us if we are not careful. In the short term, it is likely that we will see a rise in unemployment as workers in various industries are replaced by machines or software programs. For example, self-driving vehicles are expected to cause redundancies(原型：redundancy：名词-裁员，解雇) in driving jobs, such as lorry（货车） drivers, taxi drivers and bus drivers. In the medium term, if intelligent technologies gradually take jobs away from humans, we may find that people become deskilled and lose their sense of purpose in life. A longer term fear is that computers become so intelligent that they begin to make decisions without human oversight（名词：负责，照管，监督） and without regard for our well-being.

（主体2段-第二方观点-结构：递进式-短期-中期-长期）

In conclusion, while intelligent machines will no doubt improve our lives in many ways, the potential risks of such technologies should not be ignored.

（结尾：总结前文-可借用句型：While A will no doubt do sth., the potential risks of A should not be ignored.）

这篇文章出自Simon老师，对于Native Speaker又身为前考官的Simon而言，其英语语言驾驭能力肯定是很强的。这篇文章的句型及论证方法都很不错，尤其是主体2段的递进式论证很出彩，大家可以学习借鉴使用哦。

但本文中有一点小编要提醒大家：

我们可以看到其在开头的表态为较中立的态度。想要看中立态度怎么写的同学可以好好看看这篇文章。

但对于写作分数在6.5分以下的同学，这种中立态度的写法不推荐给大家，即便是双边讨论类的文章，双边虽都要讨论到，也不推荐大家进行使用。

雅思写作明确规定了，要立场清晰，立场当然包括中立。但就像我以前跟大家说过的：中立不好写，需要比较强的语言掌控能力，能把事情说清楚了，句子写明白了，不能出现歧义或者unclear，否则行文之中出现误解很有可能判断为立场不清晰。

所以建议大家尽量采取一边倒的态度，主体段依然需要双边都讨论，然后在结尾继续重申自己的立场- 虽然可能A方观点成立，但是B方在各种情况下都更有道理等等。