雅思大作文范文分析-国际旅游

题目：

International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment.

Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

翻译：国际旅游为很多地方带来了巨大的经济收益，但与此同时，很多人担忧其对当地居民和环境带来的（负面）影响。

国际旅游是否利大于弊？

话题：社会类-全球化

类型：利弊分析类

注意点：注意本题为国际旅游（International tourism）

举例子时一定要举国际旅游的例子

国家之间巨大的差别就在于文化，一定要写到文化传播

很多被国际旅游带动的国家/地区都是保留地方特色的偏远地区，小岛或小国家，这些国家/地区的环境一般比较原始，容易被破坏。

解析:

在之前构思讲解时，我们说到一种构思的方式就是去找一件事情的相关主体。那么，国际旅游这件事情的相关主体包含谁呢？

我们看到今天这个题目，主要探讨的是国际旅游对于‘旅游地’这一主体的影响。我们按正面影响和负面影响来梳理一下：

正面影响：

国际旅游带来的积极正面影响，大家有目共睹，主要在经济，文化领域。The positive impacts are observed in economic and socio-cultural dimensions.

很多拥有秀丽风光，独特文化但原本非常不发达，且不为人知的小岛，小国，都因为国际旅游的快速发展，而实现经济上的巨大飞跃。

比如度假胜地塞舌尔(Seychelles)，原本为东非印度洋上的一个并不发达的小岛国。

因为其美丽的海岛风光，人气超高的海滩而被越来越多的海外游客所熟知。

旅游业一跃成为其经济的支柱，为这个国家创造了75%的GDP。

那么我们总结一下好处：

create jobs：我们看到导图中服务商的三个分支，酒店业，景点，餐饮业的发展，都将为当地提供大量的工作岗位。

boost a country's economy：游客在旅游地的各种花费，都将为当地的经济做出贡献

increase awareness of culture：旅游少不了文化传播，宣扬了当地的文化

负面影响：

1.Destruction of nature and habitat loss（对自然及动植物栖息地的影响）：

比如咱们要在一个地方开设旅游景点，

如果这个地方原始未开垦，那咱们就要先在这里铺路建酒店等基础设施。

那么这样的基建是否是建立在对当地环境负责，可持续的基础上呢？ 

大家可以想，旅游说到底是一种商业交换，价值和利益为先。作为开发商，很有可能会按照最盈利的方式去建设而非最环保的方式：

Very often the infrastructure is built without any sustainable development plan or environment protection policies. （Good sentence!可直接用在你的文章中，把全句记小本儿上背下来，或者至少把标红单词记住。）

Therefore, development comes at the cost of nature.  （ xx comes at the cost of xx）

这个观点展开是难点。在实际操作中，我有不少学生在书写时都无法把基建毁坏环境这个事情展开说明白，所以此处多写一些，给大家提供一些可以展开的方法参考。

① New areas of land need to be cleared for（地道词组） new hotels and roads.

② Animals lose their natural habitat and have to move to a new location. Often animals get into a conflict with people when protecting their territory or looking for food. Unfortunately, most of the times animals are at loss.（动物失去栖息地，与人类争夺生存空间和事物）

③ Waste disposal problem（污水处理） is a significant contributor to（有没有觉得这个词组用的特别好？哈哈） the degradation（退化） of the environment. 

来在这个句子中感受一下词汇的力量。句型超简单：A is B，但是里面填充的词很经典- 经典在哪？

属于环境，生态类话题垂直领域中的话题词汇

名词多体现学术感

A is a significant contributor to B 这个表达方式大家可以记住哦

可以在大作文主体段因果论证中进行使用 ，替换because, because of, due to , lead to 

比如：人工智能的发展导致很多人失业（因为人工智能的发展，很多人失业了、 很多人失业的主要原因是人工智能的发展）

The development of artificial intelligence is a (significant) contributor to the unemployment. 

If untreated sewage（污水，下水道的水） water is dumped（废弃，抛弃） into the ocean, it negatively affects marine life（海洋生物-雅思阅读词汇）. 

2.Increased pollution for living space (plastic, noise, light, sewage)

说完了对旅游地环境的影响，我们再来看对当地居民的影响

比较好写的一个影响就是各种垃圾污染了当地人的生活空间，降低了生活质量， 毕竟The more people are in one place, the more waste is accumulated.

首先就是塑料垃圾(plastic waste)：such as water bottles, takeaway containers, different packaging, plastic bags, etc.

其次还有光污染(light pollution)：

To accommodate an increased number of tourists many more hotels and other facilities have to be built. More lights in the buildings, more lights and LED signs on the streets, create light pollution in the area. 

Before it was a small village, where people used to go to bed with the sunset. Now it’s a town bustling with nightlife.(对比前后可能发生的变化，突出光污染带来的巨大影响)

再者还有噪音污染（sound pollution）

Same happens with sound pollution. With the grows and development comes the noise from the people, cars, and bars. Both light and sound pollution create an adverse environment for the peoiple that live in that area.

好啦，分析了好多，来一起看精选9分范文吧：

范文分析：

Travel industry has experienced a major boom in the later part of the 20th century, which has helped some weaker nations to uplift their failing economies(好搭配-uplift-economy). While questions have been raised regarding the negative impacts that accompany the growth in the travel sector, these definitely do not outweigh the associated benefits.

（开头段：背景介绍+观点给出

1.Questions have been rasied regarding …..关于…方面的问题被提出-人们对…提出质疑。

例如：Questions have been raised regarding whether the development of internet is good or bad.

2.negative impacts that accompany the growth/development in/of….…的发展，与之而来的负面影响

例如： Negative impacts that accompany the development of internet are the unregulated spread of information and the great possibility of internet addiction. 网络发展所带来的负面影响包括信息的传播和沉迷网络) 

The economic boost（经济推动力） that accompanies a successful travel industry（定语从句，修饰前方economic boost） is quite well recognised and Thailand is the best example. The entire Thai economy revolves around tourism and the country had been able to uplift its socio economic status through its flourishing hospitality sector（繁荣的酒店业）.  Egypt is another nation that is heavily dependent on its hospitality sector.(可以在自己文章中使用的例子) The growth in the number of incoming tourists leads to innumerable（无数的，数不清的） prospects in terms of local entrepreneurship & employment generation. This is also associated with international investments and infrastructure development. The national authorities（主语）, in order to ensure safety of the international visitors provide（谓语） better law and order enforcement, improved transportation and healthcare facilities（宾语）, which in turn benefit the local population（非限制型定语从句）.

（好处段： 主要观点是促进经济发展- 给出了泰国和埃及的例子- 延伸到酒店业及基础设施建设）

On the other hand, the rising influx（名词：涌入，如：a massive/sudden influx of visitors） of holidaymakers is associated with increased incidences of crimes, prostitution and antisocial activities like drugs, human trafficking and gambling, which affect the values of the indigenous（本土的） society.（对当地社会产生的负面影响的例子，可以记忆背诵）Environmentalists are also concerned regarding environmental remodelling, that is associated with increased tourist activities in natural reserves. In this context, it is worth mentioning that, by enforcing stern（严厉的） law and order and implementing strict legislations, governments can control most of these negative impacts of tourism.

(弊端段：写出对于当地生活及环境的影响，并指出，的确有这些负面影响，但是负面影响可以被解决)

Henceforth, it can be confidently conveyed that（可背诵使用）, even though the growth in travel industry has accompanying negative social impacts, these do not outweigh the contributions made by this sector（这一领域-代指旅游业） towards social development.

（结尾重申观点）

本文的词汇，句型，长度，扣题都不错，请大家学习借鉴

有一点瑕疵在于弊端段关于环境破坏那里--Environmentalists are also concerned regarding environmental remodelling, that is associated with increased tourist activities in natural reserves.—这一句写的过于泛泛 （over-generalised）

在反方观点段落中，你可以不多写，就写一句两句，但是不代表一两句就可以很泛泛。 就比如大家看上一句写当地可能出现打砸抢偷那一句，也是一句话，但就有很多细节，各种社会不良现象，很具体。

除此之外本文其他点上写的都非常好~ 好好利用这篇范文哦