12月2日托福独立写作
When choosing a place for living, which factor is the most important one for you?
A: Living in an area that is not expensive
B: Living close to relatives
C: Living in an area with many shops and restaurants (本文的选择)
To decide where to live, one may prioritize proximity to family or houses prices and living expenses. In my opinion, neither of the two factors is more important than a decent collection of shops and restaurant.
开头段信息进展要快:句介绍两个被抛弃的选项;第二句先否定这两个选项,再介绍另一个方式同时表达立场。
It would be redundant to emphasize the importance of affordability in terms of choosing a place for living. With soaring living expenses and house prices taken into consideration, it seems fair to reside in an area with a low cost of living. However, one should be aware that such areas, usually locating on the edge of town, always come with unbearable commuting times and few public transportation options. 【分词做状语】Spending longer time waiting for the train or tram or travelling between home and workplaces, one may 【否定副词】barely make time for their families or take a good rest, thus feeling overwhelmed or frustrated. 【对比论证的开始】This is where an area with a wide selection of shops and restaurants has an edge that it tends to be conveniently located in the city center, where the public transportation options are various, and the frequency is higher. In this sense, rather than living in an inexpensive area, residents should turn to places with more shops and restaurants, as it can largely save their commuting time, thus enhancing their overall life quality.
该段通过A 选项与C 选项的对比,说明A 的不足之处C可以 补足,于是选择C
With relatives living in the immediate vicinity, people, especially those who treasure kinship, may feel secure and supported, either because they may otherwise end up feeling torn or spending all of their vacation time shuttling back and forth to visit families. 【长句后,接短疑问句,为转折做预告】However, can the close distance be counterproductive? The answer is surely positive. It is not unlikely that the young, living close to their immediate relatives, are bored by their parents’ idle chatter or aunts’ constant matchmaking. On the contrary, absence makes the heart grow fonder. Hence, it is better to live far away from those relatives than to live close to them.
先肯定B 的优势,即与亲戚住的近feel supported and secure;再驳回:距离才能产生美呀,住的太近烦呀
As a matter of fact, a wide range of shops and restaurants within walking distance is a major plus when people are choosing a place to live. If a person, particularly someone who is too busy to cook, needs to spend hours walking to a fast-food restaurant or to a convenience store, he or she may highly likely to get hangry on their way. The worst case is that he or she may become so exhausted after a long day work that they become reluctant to go out for food. As a result, their health is undermined, and their work productivity is reduced. After all, one cannot think well, sleep well and eat well unless one has dined well.
本段说明C选项(本文的选择)的独有好处
At this point, it is quite clear that the proximity to shops and restaurants is decisive in finding a place to live, and the rest two factors play less crucial roles.