对于许多中国托福学生来说，写作实际上是一个翻译过程。如何将中文转化为现实中的英语是托福基础写作中最关心的问题，也是学生应该解决的主要问题。然而，许多童鞋受到思维模式的影响，在新的托福写作中，这是中国英语的表现。这只能使文章的语言贫穷和冗长。因此，考生在准备托福写作时，应注意英语表达和汉语表达的区别，最重要的是托福写作应避免中国英语。下面由新航道的沈阳托福培训小编为您解答！

　　【托福写作】摆脱中式英语，写出更地道的句子！

　　1.Original: If we agree to say that school offers us the best book knowledge acquisition then our society offers us the best surviving techniques in a hard way.

　　Revised: If we agree that school offers the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge,then our society offers us the best method for acquiring common sense or “street smarts”.

　　Agree to say that表达中式化，只需要agreeeee that；the best book knowledge thetion改为thetion best method for the acquisition of book knowledge(学校为我们提供了获取课本知识的方法)更合适，后面的the best surviving thesthites改为thees best method for acquiringcommon sense,加上street marks(街头智慧)为文章的托福词汇增添色彩。

　　2.Original: They can spend more time studying education and communication to improve their roleas a mother, wife and daughter.

　　Revised: They can also decide to spend more time studying, education themselves, in order toimprove themselves in their roles as mothers, wives and daughters.

　　studying原话 education and comunication的说法中式化，不符合英语表达，应该是studying，educating themselves。除了单词和句子的表达，这句话还有其他问题，比如名词单复数的应用：不是为了改善他们的角色，而是为了改善自己，扮演一个好母亲的角色。

　　还有，女人不止一个人。每个人都在扮演母亲的角色，role和mother应用复数，所以improve theirrole as a 将imother改为improver themselves in their roles as mother;同样，为了保持一致，wife和daughter也可以使用复数，文中wife的复数写法是错误的，应该是wives。

　　3.Original：If you can get the point of communication by watching TV，will you..?

　　Revised：If one can learn about communicating from television，will you..?

　　原话的get the point of communication by watching 电视表达不清，难以理解，应该是指“从电视上学习交流”：learn about communicating from television.

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