2023年11月5日雅思作文题目：家庭影响还是外部影响更大？

　　11月5日雅思作文示范写作

　　Afamilyhasagreatinfluenceonchildren’sdevelopment,buttheinfluencefromoutsidethehomeplaysabiggerpartinchildren’slife.Doyouagreeordisagree?

　　范文及解析

　　Introduction

　　Behindchildren’supbringingusuallyliesundryfactors,ofwhich,frommyperspective,theexternalimpactsratherthanparentalonesmakealargerdifference.

　　【解析】

　　再现教育问题，讨论谁对教育者的影响更大。一开始是直接的。

　　※upbringingn.教养，培养

　　ConcessionRefutation

　　Asaninseparablepartinchildren’slife,thefamilydoesplayacrucialroleintheirgrowth.Thisismainlybecausechildren,especiallywhentheyareatanearlyage,areusuallyaccompaniedbytheirparents,whosepersonalexamplesanddidacticmannerswillimpactkids’conduct.Inotherwords,suchistheinstinctthatyoungkidsareinclinedtoimitatewhattheirparentsdo,whichnaturallyfollowsthatchildren,tosomeextent,seemtobetheminiaturestomirrorwhatkindsofpeopletheirparentsare.//However,doesthefamilyhavethegreatestinfluence?Theanswermaybe“no”.Suchimpactsdecayaschildrengrowolder,sincetheyarelesslikelytobeparasiticonthefamilyastheyusedtobe.

　　【解析】

　　妥协：家庭的影响确实对孩子有很大的影响。毕竟，以身作则，但随着孩子年龄的增长，这种影响会逐渐减弱。

　　※didacticadj.爱说教的

　　※miniaturen.缩影

　　※mirrorvt.体现，反射

　　※decayvi.(力量、影响等)下降

　　※寄生于beparasiticon

　　Argument

　　Asamatteroffact,informationderivedfromtheoutsideworldmattersmore.总分为>Forstarters,comparedwithparents,whothemselvesmaynotbewell-educated,authoritativeteacherstendtoexertmoreinfluencesonchildren’snurturing,whetheracademicallyormorally.Toillustrate,inclass,knowledgeableteachersassumetheirinescapableresponsibilitiesbyimpartingcertainknowledgeandskillsintochildren’smind;afterclass,itisteachersthatfigureoutandcorrectstudents’disciplinaryproblemswhenobservinghowchildreninteractwiththeirclassmates.//Besides,withthecutting-edgetechnologiesprogressing,childrenarebombardedwithmountainsofinformationthroughdigitalgadgetsonhand,whichgraduallyfacilitatesthemtofostertheirownvalues,withguardianswhoareoftenwrappedupintheirworkbeinglessinfluential.

　　【解析】

　　细化外部因素，比较论证如何减少家长的影响:1。学校教育:教师在学术和道德上都对孩子有影响，比没有受过良好教育的家长更权威；2.随着科技的发展，孩子的信息渠道越来越多，家长忙于工作，不能一直严格监督。

　　※bewrappedupinsth.把所有的心思都放在某件事上(以至于没有时间关注其他事)

　　Conclusion

　　Inlightoftheabove,itiscrystal-clearthattheimpactsfromthefamilyareovershadowedwhensetagainstthosefromoutsidethehome.

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