题目:
Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching.With the technology available today there is no justification for it,and everything should be done online.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
翻译:
先来给大家一个词汇解释,相信auditorium这个词很多同学可能不认识
Auditorium可数名词:a large public building where meetings,concerts,etc.are held剧院;礼堂;音乐厅---这个词在本题中既泛指教室,真实课堂
教师在传统课堂中为学生们上课是一种老旧的教学模式。随着科技的发展,这种教学形式在今天没有存在的意义,所有课程教学都应当在线完成,你多大程度上同意或不同意这一观点。
话题:科技类-科技改变教学形式
类型:同意与否类
关键词:Giving lectures in auditoriums,Everything should be done online
解析:这道题目的本质就是让我们对比传统教育和在线教育,指出两者的优劣然后得出一个结论-传统教育是否还有存在价值。
读书至今,相信小伙伴们都对传统教学形式比较熟悉,大家在一个教室中集中听老师上课,这种‘强迫型的聚集’对学生自觉性依赖度小。坐在教室中,即便可能走走神,犯会困,大部分情况下也还是会集中精力听讲的。对于老师而言,课堂活动也比较好组织,一些任务型的教学活动需要学生们以小组形式合作完成,在真实课堂当中相对是比较好开展的。而弊端就在于时间地点并不灵活。
今年的新冠病毒出现,不少学校不能按时开学,都开展了网上教学,于是网课一下成为热点。朋友圈中,微博,知乎上不少教师同仁以及学生都在吐槽网络质量不佳,学生参与方式死板,参与度低,影响课堂质量,不利于健康等等。
小编可以说是网课资 深户了,做在线雅思教师已久,对于网络教学其实还是很有感情的,它的确解决了很大一部分去实体课堂中学习困难的人群的问题。小编自己的观点是网课不适用于幼儿教育+大部分的青少年课程,比较适用于高中,大学+成人教育。单以英语来讲,幼儿及青少年集中注意力的时间短,需要多样的课堂活动来不断吸引他们的注意力,提高他们的学习兴趣,网课在这一点上表现平平,当然也许随着技术的发展,网络授课软件可以演化出更复杂多样的功能,届时也许可以解决这一问题,但至少现在,没有哪个软件在此处做的很突出,对于年龄小的学习者,网络教育只可以是辅助而不能成为主体。对于年龄大一些的学生,学习动机明确,自主性强,网课对于他们而言,提供了更多的便捷,学习方式和时间都比较灵活,且可以反复回看,可谓是便宜高效。
好啦,听了小编说这么多,给大家一些可以在自己作文中用的好句子:
Even though e-learning has become an education equalizer,it’s still not a replacement for the traditional classroom.Sure,the technology is advancing,but it’s not flawless.Just like any new,burgeoning innovation,e-learning faces its own challenges.
From the teacher’s perspective,they can see where students get lost in a lesson and grade assignments with the click of a button.
If a platform(指在线课堂所使用的软件/平台)could actually cater content and interaction around the individual user—their speed,their interests,their location—then e-learning could give them the ability to learn whatever they want,from wherever they want.
Some students need the push to get to class.Online students who know they can do it at“their own pace”may procrastinate(拖延).
好啦,想必你现在已经对这个题目很有想法啦,咱们接下来来看精选范文吧
Technology has changed every aspect of our life(我们生活的方方面面)including the way we learn and teach.Nowadays it is possible to earn degrees online.Online forums allow you to ask questions on any topic and receive answers within a matter of minutes.However,I still believe that online education cannot replace classroom-based learning and teaching.
(开头段:引出话题+给出观点-要点:1)此开头写了4句话,大家在自己的文章开头段一般写2-3句即可,不要过长,但是一定要给出明确的观点2)大家注意cannot这个词的写法,首先是连着写的不要分开写成can not,另外请注意不要简写成can’t,学术写作我们尽量避免简写)
Online learning has its advantages.You can learn from the comforts of your home.The flexible learning hours are a boon(福利,恩惠-对于很多可以类的题目我们都可以使用这个词,technology can be regarded as a boon for….对于…而言某项科技发明为其带来了巨大福利)for people who cannot afford to spend 6 or 7 hours in the classroom.Also,the internet has made it possible for learners to find teachers from any part of the world.So,for example,a student who wants to learn Spanish can find Spanish teachers online and learn from her home.She does not have to go to Spain or find an institution that teaches Spanish in her country.(此处给出具体的例子---这一点需要大家借鉴,在自己的写作中如果论证过程中能尽量给出这样具体到人、地方、事件的例子,会为你的文章大大加分)
(网络授课的好处)
Online learning has its disadvantages too.Since there is no one to supervise your work or evaluate your progress you need a great amount of motivation(此处注意motivation的修饰使用)and discipline to complete your course successfully.Distractions are a real problem for students doing online programs.
(网络授课的弊端)
By contrast,classroom learning does not have many of these drawbacks.The best thing about classroom learning is that it creates an ambiance(气氛,氛围)conducive(有助于,利于)to learning.In a class you are surrounded by other students who also want to score higher grades.This encourages you to work harder.In addition,subjects like medicine and engineering cannot be taught online because the emphasis is on practical not theory(再一次给出了非常具体的例子).
(教室授课的好处)
To conclude,online learning may have its benefits,but I still feel that classroom learning is superior(优于)to online learning.That said,the internet and information technology have endless possibilities.Both students and teachers will benefit a lot if they take advantage of the power of the internet in the classroom.
Source:From IELTS practice-http://www.ielts-practice.org/band-9-essay-sample-online-learning-is-better-than-classroom-learning-do-you-agree/
这篇文章是一篇9分范文,但小编个人认为这篇文章并没有9分的水平,大家觉得呢?大家可以现在不继续往下看,停在这里思考一下你觉得这篇文章的优缺点在哪里。
好了,来看看你想的和小编是否一样:
先说不足:
1)句间连接性不好:CC方面会扣掉分数,段落内部很多句子孤立存在,没有连接词,比如第二段开头:You can learn from the comforts of your home.The flexible learning hours…这两句之间逻辑关系不清晰,比如可以在The flexible learning hours…这一句前面加入如:To be more specific,…/In other words…等去表明作者想表明的逻辑关系
2)作者的观点是online education不会替代掉传统课堂教学,主体段分析了在线教育的利弊和传统教育的好,这都没问题,但是结尾段,作者给出了一个classroom learning is superior to online learning的观点,这个观点与全文的论证相符度低,全文并没有论证传统教育哪里比在线教育好了,只是说明在线教育有一些绕不开的问题,传统教育不存在这些问题。而且题目也是在说With the technology available today there is no justification for it,and everything should be done online.也就意味着结尾点题的重点应该放在-传统教育存在是有意义的,在线教育有局限,传统教育可以弥补上。所以可以说他这个结尾写的并不是很好。
但既然有这些不足,为什么还要选择这篇文章而不选其他的呢?
因为它有以下这些非常值得借鉴的优点
1)段间逻辑写的真的很好-大家仔细看三个主体段的首句,简介清晰且有关联性,第三段首句的too和第四段首句的by contrast都很好的和前一段做了呼应。
2)段内论证写的好-这个好是指具体-多次给出了具体的例子,有说服力。
3)它没有特别华丽的辞藻,但它行文通畅如流水—其实很多小伙伴可能都不具备很多高分范文的词汇水平,但是大家一定不能不具备把一件事清晰的说明白的能力。本文大部分的词都是常用词汇,在常用词汇中偶尔穿插几个有难度的词汇;没有长难句,但是综合运用了定语从句,状语从句及分词修饰等等,大程度上用自己掌握透彻的语言知识把内容正确,清晰的表达出来了,这就很好。另外文中标灰色字体的部分是一些非常地道的词汇搭配表达,作者使用了很多,大家可以借鉴学习。