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社会类雅思写作真题大作文范文分析:宅家时间变少的原因

作者:沈阳新航道 2022-02-14 10:13
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Today,many people spend less and less time in their homes.What’s the reason for it?What are the effects of this trend on individuals and society?


翻译:如今,许多人待在家里的时间越来越少。造成这个现象的原因是什么?这个趋势对个人和社会有什么影响?


分析:话题-社会类,题型-报告类,无论是话题还是题型,本次1221的考试都和上次1214的考题一致,区别在于上次的题目是在围绕资源浪费进行探讨,而这次的题目则是在探讨个人生活方式的改变。


在上周的题目分析中,曾经教给过大家一个社会类话题构思的通用方法-去对比过去和现在的差别来找原因,如果大家牢记这点,本周题目中的第 一个问题-造成这个现象的原因还是不难想到的。


首先,今昔对比来看,人们的工作方式发生了变化,很多人花更长的时间在通勤上,很多工作需要人们更多的时间投入。


另外,在休闲放松方式上,当今社会也为人们提供了更多的休闲选择,比如人们可以出去和朋友逛街购物,可以去看电影,或做更多有意思的活动如室内攀岩等等。这样来看,当今社会中,人们待在家里的时间,的确就不长了。


就影响来说,请注意,一定要写到对个人和对社会两个角度的影响,否则任务回应上会扣分数。那么对个人会有什么影响呢?我们先想想什么是home-home is the house,apartment,etc.where you live,especially with your family.家是个人和家人一起共处的空间,如果在家的时间变少,那么一般而言我们就可以写,和家人之间的关系疏远,尤其对于青少年而言,如果他们的父母很少在家和他们相处,对他们的身心发展也会产生负面影响,mutual trust,bonding等等会逐渐消失。久而久之,影响到个人的家庭关系,和身心健康。对于社会来讲,试想如果employee们每天都花很多时间在通勤及工作上,那么他们的压力会很大,甚至会影响到员工的工作表现(performance,work effectively to reach their targets),工作表现不好会导致公司的业绩下降,合作伙伴与公司解约等等(ruin the relationship with partners and clients)。


好啦,接下来我们来看这道题目的精选范文吧。


(注:此范文转载自https://www.jianshu.com/p/b9302e777065-为该作者原创-本处只做转载供学习使用)


范文分析:


Many individuals,whether parents or children,employees or employers,spend less and less time at home.(中间标紫色的部分为插入成分,表明无论是家长还是孩子,员工还是老板,不管是谁,在家的时间都变少了,大家可以借鉴此种写法在自己的文章书写中进行使用,体现对英文句子的掌控力)Besides the generally acknowledged fact that the hustle and bustle of cities deprive people’s time,there are a variety of reasons behind this.This trend may bring about negative impacts(此处的词组搭配请大家借鉴,bring about negative impacts)on people and society as well.


To begin with,daily stress,high workload,long commuting time to workplaces can cause feelings of burnout and seriously detract from the amount of time parents spend at home,let alone quality time.Furthermore,after school,an increasing number of children and juveniles are usually forced to take numerous extracurricular classes,which may also lead to less time they stay at home.In addition,after work,at present young workers prefer to spend leisure time outside with their peers,friends and colleagues.It is universally known that nowadays both employers and employees are involuntarily working overtime in all walks of life(in all walks of life表示‘在各行各业中’,此为雅思阅读中的词汇,在剑5test1 passage2 p20页第二行,大家可以找到这个词的例句,很地道的英文词汇,请学习使用).


The reasons mentioned above contribute to less and less time people stay at home.What’s worse,even at home,the time people use on smart phones,computers and televisions may far outweigh that with their families.This situation has influenced seriously on individuals and society as a whole.


For one thing,due to the lack of quality time to communicate and understand each other at home,generation gapbetween parents and children is widening(注意此处词组搭配gap搭配widen,若要表达差距变小,大家可以使用动词narrow,或者可以使用bridge这个词,例如bridge the gap between rich and poor,减小穷富差距,不要在用big/small了哦).The detrimental effect may be particularly apparent when kids become teenagers.Actually,a scientific research suggests the time parents spend with children has a powerful effect on their educational achievements.The longer the absence of parents,the worse their children’s grades.For another,anyone who can’t balance work and family life is doomed to suffering from damage physically and psychologically in the long run.


All in all,despite the different reasons for less time spent at home,consequences are undesirable for people and society.When families collapse,so does society.Therefore,the deprivation of time with families hurts both people and society.


好词:


Deprive:动词-夺走,抢去,剥夺-to take something,especially something necessary or pleasant,away from someone-大家可以使用这个词汇搭配权利,自由,睡眠等等,如:


Deprive of freedom/right/sleep


Let alone:当然不会,更不用说-一般用于否定句后表示强调,如-Some people never even read a newspaper,let alone a book.有些人从不看报纸,更不用说读书了。


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