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剑桥雅思8 test 2小作文考官范文解析英国学校年度花费
这篇雅思写作小作文出现了三个饼状图。它们的项目类型完全一致,只是年份不太相同。这时候如果我们仍然按照一图一段的结构来书写的话,就很容易出现句式相同,内容相似的情况,不利于评分。所以我们最好能对不同的项目进行归类,上涨的一组,下降的一组,保持不变的一组,然后按照折线图的方式来写作。下面让我们看看考官是如何处理这一问题的。
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剑桥雅思8 test 2小作文题目
The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981,1991 and 2001.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思8 test 2小作文考官范文
The charts show how much a UK school spent on different running costs in three separate years:1981,1991 and 2001.
In all three years,the greatest expenditure was on staff salaries.But while other workers’salaries saw a fall from 28%in 1981 to only 15%of spending in 2001,teachers’pay remained the biggest cost,reaching 50%of total spending in 1991 and ending at 45%in 2001.
Expenditure on resources such as books had increased to 20%by 1991 before decreasing to only 9%by the end of the period.In contrast,the cost of furniture and equipment saw an opposite trend.This article is from Laokaoya website.This cost decreased to only 5%of total expenditure in 1991 but rose dramatically in 2001 when it represented 23%of the school budget.Similarly,the cost of insurance saw a rising trend,growing from only 2%to 8%by 2001.
Overall,teachers’salaries constituted the largest cost to the school,and while spending increased dramatically for equipment and insurance,there were corresponding drops in expenditure on things such as books and on other workers’salaries.
剑桥雅思8 test 2小作文考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面。因为图表中的数据过多,因此考官在范文中进行了取舍。基本上每个项目都只提到了两年的数字,以是否足以说明其变化趋势为选取标准。这点大家在遇到数据较多、有存在时间线的题目时可以学习一下。
2.文章最后一段对整个图表进行了总结,指出教师工资开始最 大,设备和保险有所上升,但书籍和其他员工的工资相应下降。相比于我们之前分析过的雅思写作考官范文,该总结算是极为详细的了。
总结是小作文中非常非常重要的一部分。如果缺失的话,在Task achievement这一项的分数就会直接降到5分。
3.文章对数据进行了合理的对比。第二段强调工资开始一直都占比最多。然后比较了工资开始内部教师工资和其他员工工资的不同变化趋势。第三段指出资源方面的开销和家具与设备方面的开销变化趋势相反,而保险的变化与后者相似。换句话说,每一项都与其他项进行了比较。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。虽然没有按照我们说的上升、下降进行分段。但第 一段转述题目,第二段描述描述最 大的开始,第三段描述剩余部分,最后一段进行总结的结构也合乎逻辑。
2.文章主要使用各种各样的词汇短语来进行连接,它们同时还起到串联比较的作用。比如第二段的while,第三段的in contrast,similarly等。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。尤其是使用了各种表示上升和下降趋势的词汇。具体总结请参考下方“高分词汇短语”部分。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章使用了宾语从句,最 高 级,while的连接结构,非谓语动词做伴随状语,非谓语动词做时间状语,时间状语从句等。充分展现了语法的多样性。
高分词汇短语总结
running cost运营费用
three separate years三个不同的年份
cost=spending=expenditure
end at结束于,可以用来引导最后年份的数据
increase=rise=grow上升
fall=decrease=drop下降
see an opposite trend见证了相反的趋势,see也可以换成witness
corresponding drop相应的下降,可以用在前面一项数据上升,后一项数据下降的描述里
剑桥雅思8 test 1小作文考官范文解析农业土地退化
这篇雅思小作文为饼状图和表格的混合。这种类型的题目分段比较简单,一般都是饼状图一段,表格一段。同时在第二段的开头要有一句承上启下的句子,表明两者的联系。
饼状图部分虽然有各种各样花哨的图案,但数据并不复杂。下面的表格数据偏多,各项之间的差别也很大,大家需要在不忽略每一项的基础上选取重点,进行对比,难度较大。下面让我们看看考官是如何做的。
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剑桥雅思8 test 1小作文题目
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思8 test 1小作文考官范文
The pie chart shows that there are four main causes of farmland becoming degraded in the world today.Globally,65%of degradation is caused by too much animal grazing and tree clearance,constituting 35%and 30%respectively.A further 28%of global degradation is due to over-cultivation of crops.Other causes account for only 7%collectively.
These causes affected different regions differently in the 1990s,with Europe having as much as 9.8%of degradation due to deforestation,while the impact of this on Oceania and North America was minimal,with only 1.7%and 0.2%of land affected respectively.Europe,with the highest overall percentage of land degraded(23%),also suffered from over-cultivation(7.7%)and over-grazing(5.5%).This article is from Laokaoya website.In contrast,Oceania had 13%of degraded farmland and this was mainly due to over-grazing(11.3%).North America had a lower proportion of degraded land at only 5%,and the main causes of this were over-cultivation(3.3%)and,to a lesser extent,over-grazing(1.5%).
Overall,it is clear that Europe suffered more from farmland degradation than the other regions,and the main causes there were deforestation and over-cultivation.
剑桥雅思8 test 1小作文考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面。文章涉及到了表格中的所有数据,无一遗漏。尤其是表格中的那么多数据都有提到,非常厉害。
2.文章第 一段的开头和最后一段分别对饼状图和表格进行了总结。前者强调整体,后者强调表格中最突出的一项。可见,在我们自己写作过程中,如果图表整体趋势不好总结,可以描述其中最有特点的一项。
总结是小作文中非常非常重要的一部分。如果缺失的话,在Task achievement这一项的分数就会直接降到5分。
3.文章对数据进行了合理的对比。第 一段按照从大到小的顺序进行排列,而且一开始还对animal grazing和tree clearance进行了合并。第二段从deforestation说起,比较它对Europe和Oceania,North America的影响。随后对表格进行横向描述,说明不同地区受不同因素的影响。
突显对比的词汇:a further,only,minimal,highest,in contrast,lower,to a lesser extent
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。题目转述被分散到了两个主题段的开头。第 一段重点描述饼状图,第二段重点描述表格,最后一段进行总结概括。
2.文章主要使用各种各样的词汇短语来进行逻辑连接,不同于我们常见的and,but,however。比如第 一段中的globally,随后的a further 28%。第二段的while,also
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。尤其是表述原因的词汇几乎没有重复的地方,具体词汇短语总结请参考下方“高分词汇短语”部分。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章使用了宾语从句,被动,非谓语动词做补语,with引导的短语,并列结构等。
高分词汇短语总结
be caused by=due to=causes=impact=affect=suffer from这些词汇短语都用来表示不同因素的影响
constitute v.构成,组成。
collectively adv.集体,共同。
minimal adj.微弱的,微小的。
respectively adv.分别地。
overall adj.整体的。
to a lesser extent较弱程度上
剑桥雅思8 test 1大作文考官范文解析比较家长与学校教导孩子的作用
剑桥雅思8 test 1的这道大作文题目是典型的讨论双方观点并给出自己意见的类型(雅思写作大作文结构讨论双方观点类文章该怎么写)。就这道题目来说,我们最好采用折中的观点-家长和学校同样重要,只是作用不同,或者发挥作用的阶段不同。
家长方面,我们可以强调他们在孩子幼小阶段的巨大影响,以及其潜移默化中言传身教的作用;学校方面,我们可以强调其创造了一个微型社会,孩子需要与他人沟通交流,锻炼良好市民所需要的各项技能。同时老师会传授各种各样的知识,纠正之前在家庭养成的不好习惯等。下面让我们来看看考官是怎么论述这个问题的。
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剑桥雅思8 test 1大作文题目
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
剑桥雅思8 test 1大作文考官范文
A child’s education has never been about learning information and basic skills only.It has always included teaching the next generation how to be good members of society.Therefore,this cannot be the responsibility of the parents alone.
In order to be a good member of any society the individual must respect and obey the rules of their community and share their values.Educating children to understand the need to obey rules and respect others always begins in the home and is widely thought to be the responsibility of parents.They will certainly be the first to help children learn what is important in life,how they are expected to behave and what role they will play in their world.
However,learning to understand and share the value system of a whole society cannot be achieved just in the home.Once a child goes to school,they are entering a wider community where teachers and peers will have just as much influence as their parents do at home.At school,children will experience working and living with people from a whole variety of backgrounds from the wider society.This experience should teach them how to co-operate with each other and how to contribute to the life of their community.
But to be a valuable member of any community is not like learning a simple skill.It is something that an individual goes on learning throughout life and it is the responsibility of every member of a society to take responsibility for helping the younger generation to become active and able members of that society.
剑桥雅思8 test 1考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。第 一段改写题目并表明自己的观点,培养孩子不单单是家长的责任。第二段解释家长在培养孩子遵守规则,了解价值观念上的作用,强调他们是教育的第 一步。第三段解释学校对孩子的影响,强调与他人互动的作用。最后一段更为详细的阐述自己的观点,认为成为良好市民的学习是贯彻一生的。
2.文章对各个论点进行了论证。第二自然段先解释良好市民的含义,然后再指出家长的独特地位所带来的责任。第三自然段则指出开始上学之后,学校的影响力同样巨大。同时说明学校独特的环境的影响。
这里我们要学到的是,在论述过程中切不可泛泛而谈,而是要针对每一个对象独有的特点进行展开。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。第 一段转述题目,接下来两段分别论述两个观点,最后一段表明自己的看法。中间各段主题明确,没有杂糅的现象。
2.这篇文章使用了一定的连接词,比如开头段的therefore,第三段的however等。但更的是用了逻辑链接的方式,即每一句话的开头都是上一句话中已经出现过的内容,要么重复原词,要么用代词来指代,从而使文章整体流畅自然。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活,涉及范围也很广。具体内容可以参考下面“高分词汇短语”板块。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.这篇文章除了常见的从句之外,更多的使用了各种各样的短语结构,比如开头的has never been about,how to be good members,cannot be…alone等,后面还频繁使用了动名词做主语,比较结构,but…not…的搭配等,是的句子样式更为丰富。
剑桥雅思8 test 1高分词汇短语总结
basic skills基本技能
…never be about…only…不仅仅意味着/不单单是…
next generation下一代
respect and obey the rules尊重、遵守规则
share their values学习/了解/分享价值观念
be widely thought被广泛认为
value system of a whole society整个社会的价值体系
peer n.同龄人
learn throughout life终身学习
剑桥雅思7 test 4小作文考官范文解析电力燃料来源
该题目的饼状图跟我们见到的大多数饼状图都不太相同。以往整个饼图往往代表100%的份额,每一小块代表不同项目所占的具体比例,但该饼图却是数字。如果不注意的话会直接导致跑题。
除此之外,该题目由4张图构成。我们在分类对比的时候即可以将1980年的放在一组,2000年的放在另外一组。也可以按照澳大利亚和法国进行分类。两者没有什么好坏之分,只看哪种更加容易进行对比描述。下面让我们来看看考官是如何操作的。
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剑桥雅思7 test 4小作文题目
The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思7 test 2小作文考官范文
The charts compare the sources of electricity in Australia and France in the years 1980 and 2000.Between these years electricity production almost doubled,rising from 100 units to 170 in Australia,and from 90 to 180 units in France.
In 1980 Australia used coal as the main electricity source(50 units)and the remainder was produced from natural gas,hydro power(each producing 20units)and oil(which produced only 10 units).By 2000,coal had become the fuel for more than 75%of electricity produced and only hydro continued to be another significant source supplying approximately 20%.
In contrast,France used coal as a source for only 25 units of electricity in 1980,which was matched by natural gas.The remaining 40 units were produced largely from oil and nuclear power,with hydro contributing only 5units.But by 2000 nuclear power,which was not used at all in Australia,had developed into the main source,producing almost 75%of electricity,at 126 units,while coal and oil together produced only 50 units.Other sources were no longer significant.
Overall,it is clear that by 2000 these two countries relied on different principal fuel sources:Australia relied on coal and France on nuclear power.
剑桥雅思7 test 4小作文考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面。文章涉及到了表中所有的项目,虽然其中有一些没有给出明确数据,但仍能让人产生大致印象。比如2000年澳大利亚石油和天然气就是通过only hydro continued to…来体现的。
这种对微小数据的描写(写了太占篇幅,完全不提到又会遗漏数据)十分值得我们学习。
2.文章第 一段的第二句和最后一段都对图标的整体趋势进行了总结。前者主要总结共性,而后者则是强调差异性。
小作文里的总结十分关键,几乎是5分和6分的分水岭。
3.文章对数据进行了合理的对比。首先是澳大利亚和法国内部描述了各自的变化趋势,包括主要能源构成是什么,发生了什么变化等。其次,在后面描述法国核能数据的时候又特意提到了与澳大利亚的差异性。
比较角度包括:主要构成,相似部分,大小差异,你有我无等。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。第 一自然段转述题目,总结两个国家的数据共性。第二自然段以描述澳大利亚情况未住。第三自然段描述法国。最后一段总结两者差异。
2.文章主要使用各种各样的指代来进行逻辑链接,间或使用连接词。如第二自然段的remainder,continue,第三自然段的In contrast,the remaining,while,other sources,以及最后一段的overall等。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。尤其是对于各种占比的描述几乎没有重复的地方,具体词汇短语总结请参考下方“高分词汇短语”部分。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章除了使用并列结构之外,还应用了非谓语动词做补语、定语从句等来增加句子的多样性。
高分词汇短语总结
double v.翻倍,变成双倍。
remainder n.剩余部分。
be matched by…与…相当
contribute v.贡献,可以表示占了多少。
approximately=largely=almost用于描述不太准确的数据
rely on依赖
principal adj.主要的。
剑桥雅思7 test 3大作文考官范文解析工作满意度
该题目可以看作是雅思写作大作文报告类题目的变种。第 一个问题询问原因,第二个问题没有要求大家提供解决方案,而是评价所有员工都对工作满意是否现实。一般来说,这种题目的分段都比较好确定。开头一段,原因一段或者两段(视大家的论点数量而定),评价一段,最后结尾一段即可。
该题目的难度主要在第二问,即如何评估是否现实的问题。下面让我们看看考官是如何解决这一比较抽象的难题的。
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剑桥雅思7 test 3大作文题目
As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work,job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being.
What factors contribute to job satisfaction?
How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
剑桥雅思7 test 3大作文考官范文
Nowadays many adults have full-time jobs and the proportion of their lives spent doing such jobs is very high.So feelings about one’s job must reflect how an individual feels about his or her life as a whole,and because of this,job satisfaction is indeed very important for the wellbeing of that person.
Employees get job satisfaction in a number of ways.Firstly,a person needs to feel that they are doing valued and valuable work,so positive feedback from superiors is very important in this respect.A sense of fulfillment is also encouraged if a worker feels the job is worth doing because it contributes to the society or the economy as a whole.Secondly,when someone feels they are improving or developing their skills through training opportunities,for example,then there is a sense of progression and purpose that rewards a worker.The sense of belonging to a team or a working community also contributes to job satisfaction because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives.Satisfaction is also increased by a sense of responsibility for and loyalty to a team.
Of course not everyone enjoys their work.Hard economic realities mean that many people have little choice in the kind of job they can get.In some cases,an employee is working in a job that suits neither their skills nor their personality.Some jobs are repetitive and boring,and labour relations may be poor and lead to resentment and insecurity rather than to job satisfaction.
However,even though it is unlikely that all workers do feel happy in their work,I think it is not unrealistic to promote more job satisfaction in any job.If the factors identified above are implemented,then any job can be improved and more workers can feel greater degrees of job satisfaction.
剑桥雅思7 test 3考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。第 一段改写题目,增加了工作满意度为什么对个人十分重要的原因。第二段回答影响工作满意度的因素,列举了受重视、进步、归属感、责任感等四个原因。第三段说明每个人都满意不太现实。第四段表明自己的观点:虽然不可能每个人都对工作感到满意,但促进满意度还是可行的。
2.文章对各个论点进行了论证。不过第二自然段的论证是否充分存疑。从目前雅思写作的评分标准与改卷习惯来看,考官是不喜欢这种平行列举原因的论证方式的。还不如针对其中的两个因素在扩展充分一些。但第三自然段的论证就很好,详细说明了为什么每个人对工作满意不现实。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。基本跟我们开头所说的结构一致。但最后一段除了对全文进行总结之外,还提出了自己的观点。
2.这篇文章使用了大量的连接词来串联不同的句子。如开头段的so,because of。第二自然段的firstly,secondly,also*3,第三自然段开头的of course,第四自然段开头的however等。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活,涉及范围也很广。具体内容可以参考下面“高分词汇短语”板块。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.这篇文章除了开头段之外,使用了各种各样的从句,其中又以原因状语从句居多。不过说实话,这篇文章在语法多样性方面,完全无法跟我们之间分析过的雅思写作考官范文相比。
剑桥雅思7 test 3高分词汇短语总结
reflect v.反映。
indeed adv.确实。
superior n.上级。
a sense of fulfillment满足感。
progression n.进步。
hard economic reality n.艰难的经济现实
suit v.适合。
resentment n.愤恨,怨恨。
implement v.实施。
剑桥雅思7 test 2小作文考官范文解析肉类消耗量
这篇雅思小作文是典型的折线图。不过相比于我们平时看到的那种比较平滑的图形,这幅图的曲折有点多。我们在写作的时候要注意忽略太过琐碎的细节,更加注重整体的趋势。
分类比较方面,只有鸡肉是上升的,可以作为单独的一组;牛肉、羊肉和鱼肉都在下降。其中牛肉和羊肉的趋势有比较一致,可以将它们结合在一起描述,将鱼肉单独拿出来。除此之外,我们在描述折线图的时候要注意顶点、交叉等信息。当然,这些只是小编自己的意见,下面让我们看看考官是怎么说的。
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剑桥雅思7 test 2小作文题目
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思7 test 2小作文考官范文
The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef,lamb,chicken,and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods,with about 225 grams consumed per person per week.This article is from Laokaoya website.Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities(around 150 grams),while much less fish was consumed(just over 50 grams).
However,during this 25-year period,the consumption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively.The consumption of fish also declined,but much less significantly to just below 50 grams,so although it remained the least popular food,consumption levels were the most stable.
The consumption of chicken,on the other hand,showed an upward trend,overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989.By 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week.
Overall,the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.
剑桥雅思7 test 2小作文考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面。文章描述了四种食物的起始状态与最后一年的状态,并选取了鸡肉超过牛肉和羊肉的日期。
可见在折线图这种题型中,起始数据、结束数据以及中间交叉点是比较重要的地方,大家一定要记着写出来。
2.文章最后一句对整篇内容进行了总结。指出鸡肉消耗量整体上升,而其他肉类的消耗量则持续下降。
这句总结十分关键,几乎是小作文5分和6分的分水岭。
3.文章对数据进行了合理的对比。初始阶段说明羊肉和鸡肉比较相似,而鱼肉较少。中间阶段说明鱼肉的发展趋势与牛肉和羊肉类似,但幅度较小,同时仍然是消耗量最 低的食物;而鸡肉单列,重点说明超过牛肉和羊肉的时间。
比较角度包括:数据相似,大小差异,发展趋势异同等。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。第 一自然段转述题目,第二自然段描述初始状态,第三自然段描述牛肉、鸡肉、鱼肉这三种普遍下降的情况,第四自然段描述鸡肉这种独自上升的情况,最后一段总结。每一段都有自己的重点和分段依据。
2.文章主要使用各种各样连接词。比如第二段的while,第三段的however,also,but,so,although,第四段的on the other hand等。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。尤其是consumption使用了各种各样的替换,具体词汇短语总结请参考下方“高分词汇短语”部分。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章主要使用各种各样的并列结构,多用and,but,while连接。除此之外各种各样介词短语,补语的使用,让句子更加灵活多变一些。
高分词汇短语总结
consumption=amount=consumed=quantity消耗量的替换词
illustrate v.说明,可以用了替换show
dramatically adv.显著地
respectively adv.分别
most/least popular表示事物受欢迎程度,用来替换数量最 大和最 小
show an upward trend上升
overtake v.超过
soar v.上升
剑桥雅思7 test 1大作文考官范文解析天赋与教育
这篇雅思写作大作文要求探讨的问题与剑桥雅思5 test 4大作文的主题比较相似,都是天赋和教育到底哪个重要。不过这道题目限定了范围,即必须是在运动和音乐领域进行讨论。类型上来说,它属于典型的讨论双方观点。其常见的行文结构我们之前已经讨论过,不太清楚的同学可以参考以下文章:雅思写作大作文结构讨论双方观点类文章该怎么写
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剑桥雅思7 test 1大作文题目
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents,for instance for sport or music,and others are not.However,it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
剑桥雅思7 test 1大作文考官范文
The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in,for example,sport,art or music.
Obviously,education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills,including those associated with sport,art or music.So from our own school experience,we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.
However,some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument,from those who become good players.In other words,there is more to the skill than a learned technique,and this extra talent cannot be taught,no matter how good the teacher or how frequently a child practices.
I personally think that some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes.Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel,while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level.But,as with all questions of nature versus nurture,they are not mutually exclusive.Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeeded because of both good training and natural talent.Without the natural talent,continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive,and without the training,the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent.
In conclusion,I agree that any child can be taught particular skills,but to be really good in areas such as music,art or sport,then some natural talent is required.
剑桥雅思7 test 1考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。第 一段改写题目,说明天赋与教育是一个常见的话题,尤其是在体育、艺术和音乐领域。第二段和第三段分别讨论题目中给出的两种观点,第四段表达自己的观点,认为这两者不是互相排斥,而是相辅相成的。最后一段重申自己的态度。
2.文章对各个论点进行了充分的论证。第二自然段以学校教育为例,说明教育可以让人们获取某些技能。第三自然段论述天赋的重要性,重点放在这是无法通过培训或者教育获得的。第四自然段表明自己的观点,一开始先说天赋很重要,但天赋和教育对于成功而言缺一不可。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。没有采用我们开头所说的四段式的结构,而是额外增加了一段自己的观点。可见雅思写作并没有什么特别固定的套路,只要保证一个自然段一个主题,没有交叉即可。
2.这篇文章主要使用连接词来串联不同的句子,其中夹杂逻辑链接的方式。如第二自然段的so;第三自然段开头的however,中间的in other words;第四自然段while,but等。与此同时,我们也要注意到,除了这些连接词连接的句子之外,其他句子是如何通过在开头提及上一句中的成分来进行逻辑连接的。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活,涉及范围也很广。具体内容可以参考下面“高分词汇短语”板块。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.这篇文章几乎每一个句子都是复杂句,涉及的语法结构极为多样,包括:时间状语从句,同位语从句,限定性定语从句,比较级,no matter how引导的状语从句,while引导的并列等等。
剑桥雅思7 test 1高分词汇短语总结
relative importance相对重要性,relative用来削弱语气
be based on the belief that…建立在…信念的基础上
acquire different skills获取不同的技能
plenty of充足的
guided practice指导之下的练习
innate adj.天生的,先天的
differentiate v.区分
inherit v.继承
excel v.擅长,突出
manage v.设法完成,设法达到
be mutually exclusive互相排斥
exceptional adj.杰出的
continuous adj.持续的
剑桥雅思6 test 4大作文考官范文解析改变是好是坏
这篇雅思大作文题目是十分典型的讨论双方观点类型。其常用的写作结构我们之前已经梳理过,不太了解的同学可以参考以下文章:雅思写作大作文结构讨论双方观点类文章该怎么写。
这篇文章的写作难点主要在于题目中给出的范围太过宽泛。只是单单要求大家讨论改变是好是坏,而没有将具体什么改变说清楚。如果我们擅自将改变局限到工作、住址、爱好等范围,就很容易偏题,导致task response一项上丢分。这种题目所要求讨论问题模糊不清的情况在真正考试中还是挺经常出现的,不少同学都会因此而束手无策。接下来让我们看看考官是怎么解答的。
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剑桥雅思6 test 4大作文题目
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change.Others,however,think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
剑桥雅思6 test 4大作文考官范文
Over the last half-century,the pace of change in the life of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations.This has been driven by technological and scientific breakthroughs that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis.This means that change is not always a personal option,but an inescapable fact of life,and we need to constantly adapt to keep pace with it.
Those people who believe they have achieved some security by doing the same,familiar things are living in denial.Even when people believe they are resisting change themselves,they cannot stop the world around them from changing.Sooner or later they will find that the familiar jobs no longer exist,or that the‘safe’patterns of behavior are no longer appropriate.
However,reaching the conclusion that change is inevitable is not the same as assuming that‘change is always for the better’.Unfortunately,it is not always the case that new things are promoted because they have good impacts on the majority of people.A lot of innovations are made with the aim of making money for a few.This is because it is the rich and powerful people in our society who are able to impose changes(such as in working conditions or property developments)that are in their own interests.
In conclusion,I would say that change can be stimulating and energizing for individuals when they pursue it themselves,but that all change,including that which is imposed on people,does not necessarily have good outcomes.
剑桥雅思6 test 4考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。第 一段论述改变发生的背景,并指出改变不仅仅是个人行为,我们无法逃避的环境也在一直改变。第二段开头先说明人们不愿改变的原因,接下来论述这种做法为什么不可行。第三段反驳“变化总是好的”这一看法。最后说明自己的观点,改变有好处,但并不总是会有良好的结果。
2.文章对各个论点进行了充分的论证。第二自然段利用逻辑推理,指出一成不变是不可能的,人们终将会发现自己坚持的东西不再合适,并用工作和行为来举例。第三段重点反驳always一词,使用举例论证,指出一些创新是为了有权有势人的利益,可能对大多数人有害。
值得注意的是,考官在写作过程中并没有局限改变的范围,而是将它分成两类:由于技术进步所造成的周边环境的改变,以及个人意愿的改变。第二自然段更加侧重后者,第三自然段则更加侧重前者。这点十分值得我们学习。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。事实上,几乎所有讨论双方观点类型的文章都比较适合四段式的结构。一段开头,两段讨论双方观点,最后一段陈述自己意见或者总结。
2.这篇文章主要使用逻辑连接和指代的方式,夹杂着使用了一些连接词。比如,第 一自然段句子与句子之间就用的都是this,第二自然段更是通篇都使用同一个主语。第三自然段的开头用了however,但随后就又回到逻辑连接的路上,用it指代前面内容,用innovation代指new things.
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活,涉及范围也很广。具体内容可以参考下面“高分词汇短语”板块。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.文章使用的语法结构极为多样,几乎每一个句子都是复杂句,但又各不相同。按照我们之前分析的雅思写作考官范文,句子复杂程度不是关键,多样性才是最重要的。大家可以积累下这篇文章中各种各样的句子结构,应用到自己的写作里。
剑桥雅思6 test 4高分词汇短语总结
the pace of change改变的步伐,改变的节奏
beyond our wildest expectations远远超出我们的预计
be driven by由…所推动,由…所引起
inescapable adj.无可逃避的
constantly adv.始终
achieve security获取安全感
live in denial生活在虚幻之中,拒绝承认事实
resist change拒绝改变
inevitable adj.不可避免的
impose change施加改变
in somebody’s interests符合某人的利益
stimulating adj.振奋人心的
剑桥雅思6 test 3小作文考官范文解析流程图蚕的生长过程
这篇雅思写作小作文的题目是典型的流程图。第 一张图表介绍了蚕从出生到成熟产卵的过程,第二张图表介绍了如何利用蚕茧制作丝绸。作为雅思写作不太常考的一种题型(雅思小作文考流程图的概率大吗),流程图很容易被大家所忽略。一旦考场上遇到就彻底乱了手脚,开始考虑下一次什么时候考比较合适。但实际上流程图的写作相当简单,只要注意特定顺序词的使用即可。甚至中间有些过程看不太明白都没有关系。接下来让我们看看考官是如何处理流程图的。
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剑桥雅思6 test 3小作文题目
The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思6 test 1小作文考官范文
The first diagram shows that there are four main stages in the life of the silkworm.First of all,eggs are produced by the moth and it takes ten days for each egg to become a silkworm larva that feeds on mulberry leaves.This article is from Laokaoya website.This stage lasts for up to six weeks until the larva produces a cocoon of silk thread around itself.After a period of about three weeks,the adult moths eventually emerge from these cocoons and the life cycle begins again.
The cocoons are the raw material used for the production of silk cloth.Once selected,they are boiled in water and the threads can be separated in the unwinding stage.Each thread is between 300 and 900 meters long,which means they can be twisted together,dyed and then used to produce cloth in the weaving stage.
Overall,the diagrams show that the cocoon stage of the silkworm can be used to produce silk cloth through a very simple process.
剑桥雅思6 test 1考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面,文章描述了图中给出的所有阶段。虽然在第 一幅图片具体的时间上有所取舍,但基本不影响理解。
2.文章的最后一段对两张图表进行了总结,并指出它们之间的关系(第 一幅图中的蚕茧是第二幅图的原材料)。这点大家要尤其注意一下。如果考试中遇到的流程图是两幅图,总结的时候还需要点出它们之间的关系,而非简单分别描述即可。
3.因为是流程图,所以该篇文章中并没有进行数据的对比。这点也不是流程图考察的重点。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。第 一自然段描述蚕的成长过程,第二自然段描述丝绸的制造过程,第三自然段总结概括。每个自然段内部又按照图表中的顺序进行描述。不过说实话,流程图中只要大家不要自己随意发挥,按照图表顺序来,逻辑结构上就没有什么大问题。
2.文章的连接主要依靠各种各样表示顺序的词汇,而这也是流程图考察的重点。具体内容请参考下面的“高分词汇短语总结”板块。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。除了图标中给出的词汇之外,还使用了诸如feed on,last,emerge等十分生动形象单词。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章只有三个从句,剩下的全部都是简单句。但相邻两句的结构并没有相同的地方。还是我们之前说过的,雅思写作语法方面评分的关键不在于句子的复杂程度,而在于多样性。
高分词汇短语总结
可以用来表示事物发展顺序的词:
first of all首先
until直到
last for…持续…时间
after a period of在…时间之后
once一旦
then然后
其他词汇总结:
feed on以…为食物
emerge出现,诞生
twist扭曲,缠绕
剑桥雅思6 test 2大作文考官范文运动员收入
这篇雅思写作大作文为讨论双方观点类型,通常采用四段式的结构。开头段转述题目,陈述自己的观点。主体段一论证为什么运动员赚钱多很合理。主题段二论证为什么运动员比其他职业收入高不公平。最后一段重申自己的观点。需要注意的是,这种类型的题目一般要求两个主体段长度大体一致,不能出现明显的偏颇。
观点上来讲,运动员赚钱多的合理性可以从以下几个角度分析:1.运动员要想成功,需要付出成年累月的努力,具备极 佳的天赋,并击败其他竞争对手,这种稀缺性让他们的收入十分合理。2.运动员具备极大的商业价值,通过广告、比赛可以给企业带来巨额利润,其收入高一些也不过分。3.运动员的水平很难长时间保持,相当于是把一辈子的收入集中在几年里面。
而认为运动员收入不合理的理由则可以有这么几个:1.与医生、科学家相比,其对社会的贡献较小。收入与贡献不对等。2.运动员的巨额收入往往被用于挥霍,造成浪费。下面让我们看看考官是如何回答这个问题的。
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剑桥雅思6 test 2大作文题目
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions.Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
剑桥雅思6 test 2大作文考官范文
As a result of constant media attention,sports professionals in my country have become stars and celebrities,and those at the top are paid huge salaries.Just like movie stars,they live extravagant lifestyles with huge houses and cars.
Many people find their rewards unfair,especially when comparing these super salaries with those of top surgeons or research scientists,or even leading politicians who have the responsibility of governing the country.However,this article is from Laokaoya website,sports salaries are not determined by considering the contribution to society a person makes,or the level of responsibility he or she holds.Instead,they reflect the public popularity of the sport in general and the level of public support that successful stars can generate.So the notion of‘fairness’is not the issue.
Those who feel that sports stars’salaries are justified might argue that the number of professionals with real talent is very few,and the money is a recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful.Competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform in their relatively short career.The pressure from the media is intense and there is little privacy out of the spotlight.So all of these factors may justify the huge earnings.
Personally,I think that the amount of money such sports stars make is more justified than the huge earnings of movie stars,but at the same time,it indicates that our society places more value on sport than on more essential professions and achievements.
剑桥雅思6 test 2考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。开头段对题目进行拓展,说明运动员收入高的事实。第二自然段探讨为什么会有人觉得运动员收入不公平并进行反驳。第三自然段说明为什么有人觉得运动员收入很公平。最后一段说明自己的观点。
2.文章对各个论点进行了充分的论证。第二自然段先说不公平的原因,然后指出这种观点不成立。第三自然段通过稀有性、投入的精力、竞争、运动生涯短暂、以及缺乏隐私等因素来论证其收入的合理性。最后一段表明自己的观点,运动员的收入有一定的很理性,但它也反映了我们社会中存在的问题。
从第二自然段中我们可以了解到,探讨双方观点类型的文章里并不一定要支持某种观点,也可以说出其原因之后进行反驳。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。开头段、两个主体段和结尾段各自有各自的功能,没有重复或者交叉的部分。
2.这篇文章在连接方式的使用上特别突出。开头段中有just like…,两个主体段有however,instead,so,结尾段有but,at the same time等。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活,涉及范围也很广。比如高工资或者工资这些意思就使用了huge salaries,rewards,super salaries,money,huge earnings等。具体的词汇总结请参考下面“高分词汇短语总结”板块。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.相比于我们之前分析过的雅思写作考官范文而言,这篇文章的句子结构相对比较简单,只出现了定语从句、宾语从句、时间状语从句等常见的从句。句子结构的变化更多的通过插入语或者小短语来实现,十分值得基础稍差的同学学习。
剑桥雅思6 test 2高分词汇短语总结
constant media attention持续的媒体曝光。
celebrity n.明星,名人。
extravagant adj.奢 侈的,挥霍的。
surgeon n.手术,外科医生。
leading politicians政治领 袖。
govern v.管理。
notion n.概念。
talent n.天赋。
dedication n.献身,奉献。
intense pressure巨大的压力。
spotlight n.聚光灯。
indicate v.说明。
place more value on A than on B相比于B,更加重视A
剑桥雅思6 test 1小作文考官范文解析用水量water consumption
这篇雅思写作小作文是由折线图和表格所组成的混合图类型。这一类题目简单的地方在于我们只用分别对两个图表进行描述就好,分段会相当自然清晰。困难的地方在于我们必须找到两个图表之间的联系,才能保证两个自然段之间的衔接自然顺畅。
单单就这道题目来说,无论是上面的折线图,还是下面的表格,数据都比较少,也缺乏变化,很容易进行对比。下面让我们来看看考官是如何处理这道题目的。
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剑桥雅思6 test 1小作文题目
The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思6 test 1小作文考官范文
The graph shows how the amount of water used worldwide changed between 1900 and 2000.
Throughout the century,the largest quantity of water was used for agricultural purposes,and this increased dramatically from about 500 km3 to around 3,000 km3 in the year 2000.Water used in the industrial and domestic sectors also increased,but consumption was minimal until mid-century.From 1950 onwards,industrial use grew steadily to just over 1,000 km3,while domestic use rose more slowly to only 300 km3,both far below the levels of consumption by agriculture.
The table illustrates the differences in agricultural consumption in some areas of the world by contrasting the amount of irrigated land in Brazil(26,500 km2)with that in the D.R.C.(100 km2).This means that a huge amount of water is used in agriculture in Brazil,and this is reflected in the figures for water consumption per person:359 m3 compared with only 8 m3 in the Congo.With a population of 176 million,the figures for Brazil indicate how high agricultural water consumption can be in some countries.
剑桥雅思6 test 1考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面,折线图里,文章描述了起始点和重点的相关数字;表格里更是提到了所有六个数据。没有任何遗漏的地方
2.文章最后一句对整篇内容进行了总结,指出巴西的具体数据正好反映了全球范围内农业用水量的巨大,十分精妙的贯穿了两个图表的特点。
3.文章对数据进行了合理的对比。折线图的重点放在农业用水量高于家庭用水量和工业用水量,并点明他们上涨幅度的区别。表格则没有单纯的比较人口、灌溉土地和人均用水量这三方面的数据,而是揭示了三项数字内在的关联。使得文章行文更加流畅。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。甚至可以看作是两篇文章的组合。开头段和第二自然段都只提到了折线图,第三自然段以表格为主,但最后一句总结将两个图表联系起来。大家自己在写作过程中其实不用这么极端。开头段完全可以同时提到两张图,然后再分别叙述。
2.文章主要以逻辑连接方式为主。第二自然段的开头throughout the century承接第 一自然段的between 1900 and 2000,随后的内容,每一句话都跟上一句话有紧密的联系。第三自然段则主要使用指代的方式,第二句话开头的this代指上一句的内容,第三话的the figure则指代第二句话中的数字。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。表示数量和数字的词用了amount,quantity,consumption,water used,industrial use,figure等。作为主题词,全文很少有重复的地方。具体的词汇请参考下面的“高分词汇短语总结”。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章主要使用各种各样的并列结构,多用and,but,while连接。除此之外各种各样介词短语,补语的使用,让句子更加灵活多变一些。
高分词汇短语总结
the quantity of……的数量
dramatically adv.剧烈地。
sector n.部门。
minimal adj.少量的,微不足道的。
mid-century n.世纪中
From…onwards从…时间往后
steadily adv.稳定地,不断地。
contrast A with B将A与B进行对比
剑桥雅思5 test 4大作文考官范文解析nature or nurture
这篇雅思写作大作文要求大家探讨的话题比较常规,即天生特点和后天培养究竟哪个对个人发展和性格更有影响,也就是英语中常说的nature v.s nurture的问题。
类型上来看,它可以勉强归入到优缺点比较里。文章结构一般为四段。一段开头,一段结尾,另外两段分别站在nature和nurture的角度进行叙述。至于立场,大家既可以认为natue比较重要,也可以认为nurture比较重要,还可以综合两方观点。只要行文前后保持一致即可。下面让我们来看看考官是如何解答这一问题的。
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剑桥雅思5 test 4大作文题目
Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.
Which do you consider to be the major influence?
剑桥雅思5 test 4大作文范文
Today the way we consider human psychology and mental development is heavily influenced by the genetic sciences.We now understand the importance of inherited characteristics more than ever before.Yet we are still unable to decide whether an individual’s personality and development are more influenced by genetic factors(nature)or by the environment(nurture).
Research,relating to identical twins,has highlighted how significant inherited characteristics can be for an individual’s life.But whether these characteristics are able to develop within the personality of an individual surely depends on whether the circumstances allow such a development.It seems that the experiences we have in life are so unpredictable and so powerful,that they can boost or over-ride other influences,and there seems to be plenty of research findings to confirm this.
My own view is that there is no one major influence in a person’s life.Instead,the traits we inherit from our parents and the situations and experiences that we encounter in life are constantly interacting.It is the interaction of the two that shapes a person’s personality and dictates how that personality develops.If this were not true,then we would be able to predict the behavior and character of a person from the moment they were born.
In conclusion,I do not think that either nature or nurture is the major influence on a person,but that both have powerful effects.How these factors interact is still unknown today and they remain largely unpredictable in a person’s life.
剑桥雅思5 test 4考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。第 一自然段首先说明现代科学进步加深了我们对天生资质重要性的理解,但我们仍然无法决定基因和环境到底哪个拥有更大的影响。第二自然段承接上文,先强调基因的重要性,但接下来转折,说明基因的发挥很大程度上取决于环境。第三自然段表明自己的观点,认为两个因素互相作用才是真实情况。最后一段重申自己的观点:两者都很重要。
2.文章对自己的观点进行了充分的阐述。从现代科学说明基因的重要性出发,转到基因的作用受环境限制,再进一步阐述自己认为两者其实相互作用。整篇文章层层推进。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。分别说明天生资质的重要,资质受环境的影响,两者相互作用,最后得出结论。值得注意的是,这篇文章并没有采用我们在文章开头所说的两个主体段分别阐述两方观点的结构,但仍然受到雅思官方的认可。可见雅思写作大作文其实没有什么定式可言,只要结构合理即可。
2.这篇文章更多的使用逻辑连接的方式,即句子与句子之间自然推进,没有跳跃,或者说下一句话中的主要成分在上一句话中都出现过。除此之外,文章还用了一些非常规的连接词,如第 一自然段的yet,第三自然段的instead等。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活。几乎没有出现重复的词汇,展示了作者丰富的积累。比如“天生”这一意思就分别用了genetic,inherited,nature,而“后天”则分别用了environment,nurture,circumstances等。参见下面的“高分词汇短语总结”部分。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.整篇文章除了第二句话是简单句之外,其他所有句子都出现了从句。如第 一段中的the way we consider,whether引导的宾语从句等。但是,参考之前我们分析过的雅思写作考官范文,这并不意味着只有使用特别复杂的从句才能在雅思写作中取得高分,更重要的是句子结构的变化。
剑桥雅思5 test 4高分词汇短语总结
be heavily influenced by深受…的影响
inherited characteristics遗产下来的特点
identical adj.完全相同的
highlight v.突出,强调。
circumstance n.环境。
boost v.推动,加深。
over-ride v.推翻。
encounter v.遇到,遭遇。
dictate v.决定,规定。
剑桥雅思5 test 3小作文考官范文解析地图题
地图题在真正考试中出现的频率十分不固定。有时候可能连着两三个月都不出,有时候却可能连续两三场都有,让之前没有准备过的同学措手不及。不过,从最近几年的趋势来看,地图题考察的频率越来越高,再也不是以前可以直接忽视掉的题型。大家一定要做好心理准备。
单从剑桥雅思5 test 3的这道题目来看,它要求大家描述两个超市的选址。地图上元素很少,描述起来十分简单。关键是如何对相应的信息进行整理,并做出真正有意义的对比。让我们来看看考官是如何操作的。
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剑桥雅思5 test 3小作文题目
The map below is of the town of Garlsdon.A new supermarket(S)is planned for the town.The map shows two possible sies for the market.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思5 test 3小作文考官范文
The map shows two proposed locations for a new supermarket for the town of Garlsdon.
The first potential location(S1)is outside the town itself,and is sited just off the main road to the town of Hindon,lying 12 kms to the north-west.This site is in the countryside and so would be able to accommodate a lot of car parking.This article is from Laokaoya website.This would make it accessible to shoppers from both Hindon and Garlsdon who could travel by car.As it is also close to the railway line linking the two towns to Cransdon(25 km to the south-east),a potentially large number of shoppers would also be able to travel by train.
In contrast,the suggested location,S2,is right in the town center,which would be good for local residents.Theoretically,the store could be accessed by road or rail from the surrounding towns,including Bransdon,but as the central area is a no-traffic zone,cars would be unable to park and access would be difficult.
Overall,neither site is appropriate for all the towns,but for customers in Cransdon,Hindon and Garlsdon,the out-of-town site(S1)would probably offer more advantages.
剑桥雅思5 test 3考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面,文章清晰的描述了两个备选地点的具体位置,以及他们和周边城镇、道路交通的关系。涵盖了图片中的所有元素,没有遗漏。
2.文章最后一句对两个地点进行了总结。指出虽然两个地点都有缺陷,但对于周边城镇而言,S1的地址要好一些。小作文中的总结句十分重要,是该项评分标准中的关键所在,大家一定要重视。
3.文章对两个地点进行了合理对比。指出每个选址的优势和劣势所在(方便哪些地方的居民,如何方便),而没有仅仅罗列事实。如Hindon离S1更近,中间有铁路。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。开头段转述题目,两个主体段分别描述S1和S2两个地点。在说明其方位之后,指出优势所在(S2还说了劣势)。结尾段进行总结。整体结构十分清晰。
2.使用了各种各样的链接手段。如第二自然段中的this site指代前面提到过得S1,同一句话中有用了and so来表示因果关系。第三自然段的开头就用了in contrast来承接上文;中间又使用了theoretically…but…这样的连接方式。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。表示位置的词有be sited,off the road,close to等,同时还用了accommodate,accessible这样比较形象的词汇。具体的积累可以参见下面高分短语部分。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章中出现了并列结构,非谓语动词做补语,定语从句,原因状语从句,非限定性定语从句等。没有任何两个句子的结构是完全相同的,充分展现了语法的多样性。
高分词汇短语总结
proposed location提议的位置
is sited just off the road就位于路边
lying 12 kms to the northwest位于西北方向12公里远的地方
accommodate容纳,不单单可以表示住宿
make it accessible to shoppers购物者可以使用,注意accessible
a potentially large number of潜在大数量的…,potentially的使用
in contrast相比之下
theoretically…but…理论上…但实际上…
offer more advantages提供更多的优势
剑桥雅思5 test 2大作文考官范文解析
这篇雅思大作文要求大家比较在高中毕业之后,大学开始之前出去工作或者旅游一年的优势和劣势。属于比较典型的优劣势比较类题目。优势方面,这一年能够极大的开拓普通学生的视野,了解到真实社会运行的情况,并可能会攒下一笔不菲的收入,供以后上大学使用。劣势方面,一年结束之后,学生可能无法适应学校里的生活。同时,在与社会上其他人交往的过程中可能会染上不良的习惯,影响日后的生活。当然,这只是一些大致的思路,下面让我们来看看考官是如何解答这一问题的。
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剑桥雅思5 test 2大作文题目
In some countries,young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
剑桥雅思5 test 2大作文范文
It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school.The trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel,but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.
The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world.By contrast,those who have spent some time earning a living or traveling to other places,have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on.They tend to be more independent,which is a very important factor in academic study and research,as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.
However,there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age.Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment.They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job,or to do something completely different from a university course.But overall,I think this is less likely today when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.
My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons.That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why.Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.
剑桥雅思5 test 2考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。第 一自然段对题目进行同义转述,并且通过区分贫困学生和富裕学生来将问题具体化。第二自然段指出空闲一年的优点,更加丰富的经历可以让他们更为独立。第四自然段指出这样做的缺点,无法适应学术环境。但最后又反驳说这不太可能。
2.对每个观点进行了详细的阐述。第二自然段通过对比的方式来说明为什么空闲一年会让人变得更加独立,并且尤其强调对未来学习生涯的好处,呼应题目中的学生阶段。第三自然段的缺点描述同样落脚于对学习的影响。这点很值得我们学习,在进行论述的时候,一定要注意结尾的落脚点。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。采用四段式的结构,一段开头,一段讲优点,一段讲缺点,最后表明自己的观点。每个自然段都有自己的独立主题,没有出现杂糅的情况。
2.这篇文章在链接方式上尤其突出。开头段用but连接贫穷学生与富裕学生。主体段一用了by contrast和as well as,主体段二开头用了however来表示另一方面的情况,快到结束的时候又用but overall来表示自己相反的观点。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活。几乎没有出现重复的词汇,展示了作者丰富的积累。但与此同时,我们也要注意到范文中并没有使用十分生僻的单词。可见雅思官方更加注重词汇的丰富程度,而非单纯的认识很难的单词。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.这篇文章的作者很喜欢使用各种各样的从句和并列结构,如第 一自然段就出现了not…but…,而且中间还插入定语从句表示学生身份。第二自然段的开头更是同一句话中包含了定语从句,同位语从句,以in terms of…的短语。后面还有宾语从句,时间状语从句等。没有任何相邻两句的句子结构是相同的。
剑桥雅思5 test 2高分词汇短语总结
is not restricted to…,but is also evident among…某一现象并不仅仅局限于…,而是在…中也很明显
be economically independent经济上独立
recognition认知,可以替换argue,believe等词用来表示人的观点
earn a living谋生
have personal resources to draw on用自己的资源可以依靠
take time off休息
end up最终…
academic qualifications学术资质
essential adj.必要的,必需的
reasonable career还行的职业
broaden their horizons扩展他们的视野
get a clear perspective获得清晰的认知
剑桥雅思5 test 1小作文考官范文解析折线图(线状图)
这篇折线图描述了三个国家(日本,美国和瑞典)老年人口比例的变化趋势。除去一般折线图如何划分阶段的难点之外,这道题目还涉及到过去和未来的划分。尤其是过去与未来的分界点其实并无明显变化。如果以此为分界点的话,整篇文章的逻辑结构不好处理;但如果不以此为分界点的话,时态问题又是个大麻烦。下面让我们看看考官是如何解决这一问题的。
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剑桥雅思5 test 1小作文题目
The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思5 test 1小作文考官范文
The graph shows the increase in the aging population in Japan,Sweden,and the USA.It indicates that the percentage of elderly people in all three countries is expected to increase to almost 25%of the respective populations by the year 2040.
In 1940 the proportion of people aged 65 or more stood at only 5%in Japan,approximately 7%in Sweden and 9%in the US.However,this article is from Laokaoya website,while the figures for the Western countries grew to about 15%in around 1990,the figure for Japan dipped to only 2.5%for much of this period,before rising to almost 5%again at the present time.
In spite of some fluctuation in the expected percentages,the proportion of older people will probably continue to increase in the next two decades in the three countries.A more dramatic rise is predicted between 2030 and 2040 in Japan,by which time it is thought that the proportion of elderly people will be similar in the three countries.
剑桥雅思5 test 1考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.数据选取方面,文章选择了初始状态,1990年,以及结尾状态三个阶段。其中1990年的选取是因为该阶段日本老年人的比例从下降变为上升。换句话说,以后我们在看到折线图的时候,也可以从这三方面来叙述,即开头、结尾和转折点。
2.文章第 一自然段的第二句话概括了整个图表的特点。可见小作文中的总结句并不一定要在结尾,放在开头也可以。
3.文章对数据进行了合理对比。第二自然段指出开始的时候美国和瑞典的数据上升并且较高,但日本数据先下降再上升,并且保持较低的水平。将美国和瑞典作为一个整体与日本相比。第三自然段先指出整体上升的趋势,然后再凸现日本上升的比较快。最后三个国家达到相似的水平。整篇文章既写明了三个国家的相同之处,又指出他们的差别。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。第 一自然段转述题目,总结整体趋势。第二自然段以1990年之前的变化为主。第三自然段则以1990年以后以及未来的变化为主。
2.使用了各种各样的链接手段。第二自然段使用了However,while来连接不同句子,使用before来连接同一主语的不同发展阶段。第三自然段则用in in spite of开头,用by which这一定语从句来表示同一主体的不同阶段。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富。“数据”一词分别使用了proportion,percentage,figure等词来进行同义替换。上升和下降也采用了不重复的词汇来表示。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章虽然也有各种各样的从句,但并不是每个句子都很复杂。关键在于句子结构各不相同。灵活使用各种非谓语动词,状语前置来展现句子的多样性。
高分词汇短语总结
proportion,percentage,figure之间的同义替换
aging,elderly,aged 65 or more,older people均可表示老年人,可以同义替换
increase,rise,grow上升
dip轻微下降
be expected to…,will probably continue to…,be predicted…表示未来的情况
dramatic rise剧烈的上升
indicate表明,表示
剑桥雅思4 test 4大作文考官范文解析student behavior学生行为问题
这篇雅思写作大作文是典型的报告类题目,要求大家探讨学校中学生不良行为的原因和解决方案。通常来说,报告类文章的结构十分容易安排。如果采用四段式的话,可以用一段话解析原因,一段话提供解决方案。而如果采用五段式的话,则可以用两段来阐述原因或解决方案。具体的段落安排还要看大家的所能想到的论点。
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剑桥雅思4 test 4大作文题目
In many countries school have severe problems with student behavior.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?
剑桥雅思4 test 4大作文考官范文
Poor student behaviour seems to be an increasingly widespread problem and I think that modern lifestyles are probably responsible for this.
In many countries,the birth rate is decreasing so that families are smaller with fewer children.These children are often spoilt,not in terms of love and attention because working parents do not have the time for this,but in more material ways.They are allowed to have whatever they want,regardless of price,and to behave as they please.This means that the children grow up without consideration for others and without any understanding of where their standard of living comes from.
When they get to school age they have not learnt any self-control or discipline.They have less respect for their teachers and refuse to obey school rules in the way that their parents did.
Teachers continually complain about this problem and measures should be taken to combat the situation.But I think the solution to the problem lies with the families,who need to be more aware of the future consequences of spoiling their children.If they could raise them to be considerate of others and to be social,responsible individuals,the whole community would benefit.
Perhaps parenting classes are needed to help them to do this,and high-quality nursery schools could be established that would support families more in terms of raising the next generation.The government should fund this kind of parental support,because this is no longer a problem for individual families,but for society as a whole.
剑桥雅思4 test 4考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。指出是父母对孩子的娇惯导致了这一问题,并提出相应的解决方案,包括让父母意识到这种方式可能导致的后果,提供父母课程,建立高标准的托儿所等。
2.对每个观点进行了详细的阐述。父母溺爱方面具体指出物质上的娇纵会导致孩子什么样的心态,并如何影响他们在学校中的表现。这里有两点值得我们学习:一是孩子心态的具体化,而不要只是说溺爱会导致任性就结束了;二是最后落脚到对学校行为的影响,呼应题目。而许多同学都会忽视这一点,只说到对孩子影响不好就结束了。解决方案方面也都是围绕父母这边展开,没有提及不相关的内容。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。第 一段介绍主题,第二段将父母溺爱对孩子的影响,第三段讲这种影响会对孩子在学校的行为。第四段的开头承接上文,指出父母自身应该怎么做。最后一段讲解父母之外的主体应该如何。
2.这篇文章主要采用逻辑连接的方法,真正的连接词反而出现的比较少。所谓逻辑连接,即句子与句子之间没有内容上的跳跃。再简单点说就是下一句话的主语一定在上一句话中出现过。文章层层推进,指代使用合理,读起来很顺畅。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活。不过我们通篇看起来,其实里面也没有出现特别复杂的词汇。可见雅思写作对词汇一方面的要求主要是词汇的多样性和恰当性,而非复杂性。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.句子结构极其多样。这篇文章除了常见的从句结构之外,非常喜欢使用插入语。如第二自然段的not in terms of…but…,甚至其中还加入了原因状语从句。所以说雅思写作的语法评分并不是句子越复杂越好,而是跟词汇一样,越多样越好。
高分词汇短语总结
increasingly widespread problem越来越普遍的问题。
be probably responsible for…对某事负责。注意其中probably的使用来减弱语气。
be spoilt被宠坏了
in material ways物质方面
behave as they please想怎么做就怎么做,与前面的have whatever they want对应
self-control自控
obey rules遵守规则。rule可以与discipline同义替换
combat this situation对抗/解决这一问题
the solution lies with/in解决方案在…身上
be considerate of others为他人着想
parenting class照顾孩子的课程
剑桥雅思4 test 3小作文考官范文解析
这篇雅思写作小作文的类型为柱状图,数据可以分成两个维度:男女以及不同的学历程度。相应的,我们整篇文章的结构可以从以下三个方面进行:1.以男女为切入点进行比较,一个主体段写男性情况,另外一个主体段写女性情况。2.以学历为切入点,将学历分为高中低三档或者高低两档,再分别描述每一档的具体情况。3.以男女比较为切入点。一个自然段写男性比女性多的学位情况,另外一个自然段写女性比男性多的学位情况。这三者并没有什么高下之别,关键看大家如何组织相关数据进行有逻辑的比较。
接下来让我们来看看考官选取了哪个角度,又有哪些词汇短语值得我们积累。
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剑桥雅思4 test 3小作文题目
The chart below shows the different levelsof post-school qualifications in Austrlia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思4 test 3小作文考官范文
The chart gives information about post-school qualifications in terms of the different levels of further education reached by men and women in Australia in 1999.
We can see immediately that there were substantial differences in the proportion of men and women at different levels.The biggest gender difference is at the lowest post-school level,where 90%of those who held a skilled vocational diploma were men,compared with only 10%of women.This article is from Laokaoya website.By contrast,more women held undergraduate diplomas(70%)and marginally more women reached degree level(55%).
At the higher levels of education,men with postgraduate diplomas clearly outnumbered their female counterparts(70%and 30%,respectively),and also constituted 60%of Master’s graduates.
Thus we can see that more men than women hold qualifications at the lower and higher levels of education,while more women reach undergraduate diploma level than men.The gender difference is smallest at the level of Bachelor’s degree,however.
剑桥雅思4 test 3考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.文章基本呈现了图表中的所有数字。为了避免数字过多的情况,同一学位水平中男女所占比例只出现了一个(总和为100%)。不影响我们对图表的认知。2.文章结尾处总结了图表的整体特点,即男性在高等学位和低等学位所占比例较多,而女性则在本科阶段所占比例较多。3.文章对数据进行了合理对比。主体段一开始先指出男女差异最 大的类别。然后将剩余类别按照男性多于女性或者女性多于男性进行分类比较。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章逻辑结构合理。分组之间没有出现重复的情况,而且点出了最 大的差异所在。2.使用了各种各样的链接手段。如第二段开头的immediately,第二段结尾处的by contrast,第三段开头的at the higher levels of education等。也就是说链接手段并不一定得是and或者however,重要的是让文章整体行文流利通常。3.指代方面,利用定语从句和词汇(counterpart)来避免混乱和重复。
Lexical Resource
文章用词丰富,持有学位使用了held,with,reach等进行同义替换。同时比较过程中除了使用比较级之外,还用了outnumber这样的词来展示自己的词汇积累。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章虽然也有各种各样的从句,但并不是每个句子都很复杂。关键在于句子结构各不相同。灵活使用各种非谓语动词,状语前置来展现句子的多样性。
高分词汇短语总结
in terms of在某方面…
substantial difference in在…方面存在巨大差异。substantial可以替换big,significant等词汇。
by contrast相比之下。用于连接不同的情况。
marginally少许地,轻微地。可以用在比较级之前用于修饰程度。
outnumber(在数量上)压到,比…多。可以用于替换比较级。
counterpart对应的事物/人。可以用来指代句子中之前已经提到的主语或者宾语的对应对象,如这篇文章就用了female counterparts来与前面的men对应。
constitute构成。可以与make up,consist,represent等代表比例的词替换。
剑桥雅思4 test 2大作文考官范文解析happiness幸福
这篇雅思写作大作文要求大家探讨幸福为什么很难定义,以及实现幸福的重要因素,可以被归为报告类的雅思题目。按照常规的写作方法,我们可以采用四段式或者五段式的结构。第 一段同义改写题目,并明确提出自己的观点;第二段详细说明难以定义的原因;接下来用一个自然段或者两个自然段阐述重要因素;最后一段结尾。
但这篇考官范文却没有采用以上结构,而是很流畅很自然的按照自己的想法去论述。这就告诉我们要想在雅思写作中得高分,固定的结构或者套路并不是必须的。只要论述充分,结构合理即可。
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剑桥雅思4 test 2大作文题目
Happiness is considered very important in life.Why is it difficult to define?What factors are important in achieving happiness?
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Happiness is very difficult to define,because it means so many different things to different people.While some people link happiness to wealth and material success,others think it lies in emotions and loving personal relationships.Yet others think that spiritual paths,rather than either the material world or relationships with people,are the only way to true happiness.
Because people interpret happiness for themselves in so many different ways,it is difficult to give any definition that is true for everyone.However,this article is from Laokaoya website,if there are different kinds of happiness for different individuals then the first step in achieving it would be to have a degree of self-knowledge.A person needs to know who he or she is before being able to know what it is that makes him or her happy.
Of course,factors such as loving relationships,good health,the skills to earn a living and a peaceful environment all contribute to our happiness too.But this does not mean that people without these conditions cannot be happy.
Overall,I think an ability to keep clear perspectives in life is a more essential factor in achieving happiness.By that I mean an ability to have a clear sense of what is important in our lives(the welfare of our families,the quality of our relationships,making other people happy,etc.)and what is not(a problem at work,getting annoyed about trivial things,etc.).
Like self-awareness,this is also very difficult to achieve,but I think these are the two factors that may be the most important for achieving happiness.
剑桥雅思4 test 2考官范文解析
Task Response
1.文章全面回答了题目中的问题。指出幸福之所以很难定义是因为它对每个人都意味着不同的东西。要实现幸福最关键的是拥有自我认知和权衡能力。
2.对每个观点进行了详细的阐述。具体举例幸福对不同人所意味的东西,如物质、精神、爱与情感;从逻辑上说明为什么自我认知和权衡能力对幸福很重要。中间还插入了让步段。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.文章分段比较合理。第 一自然段回答幸福为什么重要。第二自然段引出自我认知。第三自然段让步论述。第四自然段强调权衡能力。最后一段总结全文。
2.十分自然的使用多重链接手段。第 一自然段就出现了however,while,yet等连接词。但更为重要的是,文章十分恰当的使用了各种指代(it,this,that),并且在切换段落的时候有句子充当承上启下的作用(提及上一段内容的同时开启下一段),整体过度非常平顺。
Lexical Resource
文章用词十分灵活,比如第二段开头作者就用了interpret,而没有使用我们更加熟悉的explain。类似的例子还有第四段的clear perspectives,essential等。通过这些词汇我们可以看出,雅思写作其实并不要求使用很生僻的单词,关键在于要能恰如其分的表达句子含义。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
1.作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。
2.句子结构极其多样。除了我们比较熟悉的原因状语从句,宾语从句,条件状语从句等,文中还出现了rather than引导的插入语,非谓语动词充当表语,双重否定等。
高分词汇短语总结
wealth and material success财富与物质上的成功
…lies in…存在于…之中
interpret happiness解读幸福
more essential factor更为基本的因素
the welfare of our families家庭的安全健康
annoyed about trivial things为微不足道的事情而困扰
剑桥雅思4 test 1小作文考官范文解析
这篇小作文的题目乍看起来比较简单,无论是描述对象还是数据都不算太多,不用费心去考虑取舍的问题。但真正着手去写的时候就会发现两个难点:其一是左边一栏七个对象究竟该如何分类才能保证整体文章的结构符合逻辑,行文顺畅。其二是表格过于简单,反而容易导致句子结构重复,用词单一。让我们一起来看看考官是如何处理这个问题的,并从雅思写作的四个评分维度来解析其文章究竟好在哪里,又有哪些值得我们总结借用的地方。
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剑桥雅思4 test 1小作文题目
The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思4 test 1小作文考官范文
The table gives a breakdown of the different types of family who were living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
On average,11%of all households,comprising almost two million people,were in this position.However,those consisting of only one parent or a single adult had almost double this proportion of poor people,with 21%and 19%respectively.
Couples generally tended to be better off,with lower poverty levels for couples without children(7%)than those with children(12%).This article is from Laokaoya website.It is noticeable that for both types of household with children,a higher than average proportion were living in poverty at this time.
Older people were generally less likely to be poor,though once again the trend favored elderly couples(only 4%)rather than single elderly people(6%).
Overall the table suggests that households of single adults and those with children were more likely to be living in poverty than those consisting of couples.
剑桥雅思4 test 1考官范文解析
Task achievement
1.文章涵盖了题目中给出的所有条目和大部分数据。虽然对百分比方面更加偏重,但具体人数也有提到。2.文章末尾恰当的总结了表格的整体趋势,即单身人口和拥有孩子的家庭与其他类别相比更容易处于贫困之中。3.文章对数据进行了合理对比。单身父母和单身成人为一类,与澳大利亚平均值对比;夫妻与单身人群进行对比,同时组内有无孩子进行比较;老年人与其他类比进行对比,并再次提到之前夫妻类别里总结的情况。
Coherence and Cohesion
1.整体文章结构分类明确,组织合理。单身为一组,夫妻为一组,老年人为一组,没有出现重合交叉的情况。2.句子之间的衔接手段较为成熟,使用了however,once again,though等链接手段。3.指代合理,没有出现歧义。如第二自然段第二句的those consisting of,以及随后的this proportion等。
Lexical Resource
1.文章在描述数据的时候几乎没有出现重复的词汇。如“包含”一意就分别用了comprising和consisting of。2.文章使用了一些不太常用的词汇,或者常见词汇的灵活用法,比如favor名词动用,
Grammatical Range
文章中出现了各种各样的语法结构,如定语从句,非谓语动词充当句子成分,同位语从句,比较级等。
高分词汇短语总结
give a breakdown of…给出…的具体类别,展现…的详细情况
on average平均来看,总的来说
comprise v.包含,包括,组成,构成
consist of v.有…组成,包含,包括
have double this proportion of…某种事物比例的两倍
tend to倾向于,可以用于表示趋势或者大体情况
It is noticeable值得注意
higher than average比平均水平高
once again再一次,仍然
favor v.偏爱,有利于
be more/less likely to更加可能/不太可能怎么样
建筑用砖制造过程-雅思写作流程图flow chart-雅思小作文范文process of manufacturing bricks
这篇雅思写作小作文要求大家描述建筑用砖的制作过程,属于流程图的范畴。流程图在雅思写作中考察的频率较低,一年48-50场考试中会出现2-3次。因为不少同学在备考过程中存在侥幸心理,直接忽略这种题型,导致每次遇到之后都是哀鸿遍野,特别凄惨。其实流程图的套路很简单,只要抓住顺序,做好归类就可以了。小编搜集了一篇相关的高分范文,以供大家参考。
雅思写作小作文题目
The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
雅思写作小作文范文
The given diagram shows different stages of brick manufacturing for the building industries.Generally speaking,brick production involves 7 steps,starting from the digging stages and ending at the delivery stage.
题目给出的图表显示了建筑行业砖块制造的不同阶段。一般来说,砖的生产涉及7个步骤,从挖掘阶段开始,到交付阶段结束。
As is given in the graph,the first step of brick manufacturing is digging the clay with a large digger.This clay is then filtered and processed in a roller machine and then mixed with sand and water.In the third stage,the mixture is either kept in a mold or cut in a wire cutter to make the raw shape of the bricks.In the next step,the shaped raw bricks are dried for 24 to 48 hours in a drying oven.After that,the dried raw bricks are kept in a kiln,both in moderate and high temperature,up to 1300 degree centigrade and then placed in a cooling chamber for about 48 to 72 hours.This process makes the brick to be packed and delivered in the final two steps.The delivery process is the final process of brick manufacturing and as it is noted,brick making is a moderately complex process that requires some predefined works to make it usable.
如图所示,制砖的第 一步是用大型挖掘机挖掘粘土。然后,将这种粘土过滤并在滚筒机中进行处理,然后与沙子和水混合。在第三阶段中,将混合物保留在模具中或用线切割机切割以制成砖的原始形状。在下一步中,将成形的生砖在干燥炉中干燥24至48小时。之后,将干燥的生砖在窑中保存,经过中等温度和高温阶段(1300度)后,在冷却室中放置约48到72小时。此过程让砖在最后两个步骤中被包装和交付。交付过程是砖制造的最终过程,并且要注意,砖块制造是一个中等复杂的过程,需要进行一些预定义的工作才能使用。